TPO 21- independent writing
To have the ability to get along well with people is vital in work places. It relates to whether our bosses like us or our partners would help us. Hence, many people claims that letting students learn how to relate well to people is more important than study. Nevertheless, in my opinion, students should spend more time on studying in school. In the ensuing essay, my perspective will be substantiated by underlying reasons.
First of all, the knowledge we acquire from school are the ability less people have. To take myself as an example, when I was a university student, I studied business management as my major at school. After I had a job, commerce which I learned from school become my specialization that only me in the office have the background knowledge, which then assisted me to be promoted faster than other colleagues who had worked there longer than me. However, most of the people in our company were good at relating well to people. To be more specific, relating well to people is an ability that is easier to acquire. It don’t need to take our four years to study full-time in a university but with shorter time.
Secondly, studying hard in school is only in a short period in our life which we should cherish. After we graduate, we will have no opportunity to extent my study if I don't apply for a higher degree. For example, after I no longer were a student, it’s no chances for me to get a deeper knowledge of my major, business management. I have to use my spare time to read some related book but no teacher can offer me suggestion and lecture. I missed studying as a students sometimes, and even regretted on not study harder to acquire more knowledge from teachers. On the contrary, relating well to people is an ability we can learn through our whole life. It is a skill we can always learn from our friends, colleagues and clients.
To sum up, I believe that students should spent most of their time on studying in school than learning on how to relate well to people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 615, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'does'?
Suggestion: does
...n ability that is easier to acquire. It don’t need to take our four years to study ...
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Line 5, column 169, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... no opportunity to extent my study if I dont apply for a higher degree. For example,...
^^^^
Line 5, column 458, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...stion and lecture. I missed studying as a students sometimes, and even regretted on not st...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, first of all, in my opinion, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59166666667 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57498501734 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502777777778 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4736102897 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9473684211 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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