TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The ability to relate well to other people is important because humans are a social-based creature.Some people think having good communication skills is much more important than studying hard, while others disagree. In my opinion, while studying hard is a really important key to being successful in your future occupation, having a good skill of communicating with others is more important than only studying hard for two major reasons that are described hereunder.
First, what specification one's want to take responsibility for, needs to work as a group.We can not find a job that doesn't form an aggregation of people, and if one person lacks in this skill he/she won't be capable of doing her/his work as best as he/she could. For example, back to two years ago I was a member of student scientific society of computer engineering department, and we were five main members, our duty was to help the department to develop the student's skills in both practical and theoretical Field. So we were in charge of performing classes, seminars and so on.we had a member who lacked in this skill and she was amazingly ingenious but she couldn't keep up with us therefor; we couldn't trust her when we gave her a task to do, especially when it needed to communicate with professors and other students, and we basically gave her the task that wasn't at all related to her knowledge, so as you can see being unable to relate to other people makes you be less than you are.
Second, by having a good relating skill, you can learn from your colleagues and share your knowledge with them, and make yourself and your company improve. As an instance, there is a website called "stack overflow", it was built for people computer related graduates and undergraduates degrees to askes their problems on a specific content. and other people will help the person who asks the question to find the best way to solve his/her problems.and there will be the situation that is vice-versa, which this time the one that has asked a question before will share a method solve another problem being asked by one another. So that person will improve her/his knowledge and make other people improve.
all in all, having the ability to relate to other individuals gives you a better perception of you and your job to yourself, and what ones have studied for.so as far as I am concerned I will suggest those individuals who lack this ability to work on it and improve to see a jump to the next level for their self and their company.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nsibility for, needs to work as a group.We can not find a job that doesnt form an ...
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...k as a group.We can not find a job that doesnt form an aggregation of people, and if o...
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...and she was amazingly ingenious but she couldnt keep up with us therefor; we couldnt tr...
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...he couldnt keep up with us therefor; we couldnt trust her when we gave her a task to do...
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...s their problems on a specific content. and other people will help the person who a...
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...d other people will help the person who asks the question to find the best way to solve his/her p...
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...owledge and make other people improve. all in all, having the ability to relate to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, so, well, while, as to, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75688073394 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71726950686 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516055045872 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 20.1344086022 214% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.79503956 48.9658058833 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 207.4 100.406767564 207% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 43.6 20.6045352989 212% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244126371115 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104512539662 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076803802643 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157833684912 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0745100337532 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.8 11.7677419355 194% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.29 58.1214874552 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 10.1575268817 186% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.22 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 10.0537634409 191% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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