Obviously, being intelligent in the field which your future job requires is frequently important, if you want to prosper. However, sometimes getting on well with people, moreover, getting on well with people you don’t know, is much more valuable. So, I definitely agree with the statement, and in this essay reasons will be explored.
First of all, we should be aware of the fact that people learn trough their whole life, so even if you were not good at study at school, you can improve your knowledge during working process. You still can learn something new by dealing with issues, but you can not learn how to relate well to people. You can follow some tips how to relate well to people who are your costumers using a special scheme your working place may provide you, though. However it’s still won’t be your natural characteristic and in compare with those, who can naturally get on well with people, diverse will be too noticeable.
Second of all, according to why good relating to people is so valuable, I have to point out that working jointly not only makes working more productive, but also it makes atmosphere pleasant for costumers as well. Having good relationships with people may also be useful as a mean of advertisement, what is, undoubtedly, necessary for those, who want to have successfully growing business. It may sound egoistic oand hypocritically, but from the business point of view, the more influential person you have good relationships with is, the more beneficial it may be for you and your career. From my own experience I may assert that if you have a good friend who has high social status, this friend will definitely help you with getting a job, support you, or even can help you somehow to prosper just like any friend would do.
Finally, to conclude my point of you, it's necessary to note that in nowadays business world it doesn't matter how good you are at study or in your working field: if you can’t relate on well to people, you, probably, can’t succeed without communications which, sometimes, help way better than knowledge.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: you're; you are
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Suggestion: However,
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Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, well, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1746.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89075630252 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69126311587 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535014005602 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.8669821818 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.5 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.75 20.6045352989 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266736866955 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114467601455 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0299275785662 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174178724289 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339501574994 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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