TPO-30 - Integrated Writing Task A little over 2,200 years ago, the Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. According to some ancient historians, the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a "burning mirror": a polished co

From the reading we have learned about weapon called a “burning mirror”, which is made of polished copper sheet curved in parabolic shape to cause fire with the power of sun lights. The idea of this weapon claims to be impossible to release, however, the professor disapproves this statement.

First of all, the passage states that the ancient Greeks were not technically advanced enough to create a large copper mirror in parabolic shape. But according to the professor’s speech, it was not necessary to create the only one huge copper sheet. The more possible mean to activate the weapon is to make 100 small copper sheets and then just to form a required shape to make the weapon enable to be used.

Second of all, the article says that according to the experiment it would take too much time to burn the wooden complex of ships using “burning mirror”. Moreover, the object has to be unmoving. That’s why the use of this weapon is not practical. Nevertheless, the professor claims that the core of the weapon was not a wooden part of ships, but its sticky pitch, which inflames in seconds, although the ship may move.

Finally, the reading claims that the use of “burning mirror” was just simply less effective than flaming arrows, which could expeditiously take the ship on fire. But the professor suggests that ancient Greeks used the combo of two weapons together. It not only made enemies confused by making them think that they deal with “mirrors” only, it allowed to cover the weapon with copper sheets and then enabled to use effectively as well.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 54, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ing we have learned about weapon called a 'burning mirror', which is ma...
^
Line 7, column 373, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'covering'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: covering
...th 'mirrors' only, it allowed to cover the weapon with copper sheets and then...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 392, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...os; only, it allowed to cover the weapon with copper sheets and then enabled to u...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, may, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, then, well, as to, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1347.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 269.0 270.72406181 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00743494424 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8478311403 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565055762082 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 419.366225166 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7680034426 49.2860985944 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.25 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4166666667 21.698381199 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315613788515 0.272083759551 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119424850284 0.0996497079465 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072290195244 0.0662205650399 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204724962339 0.162205337803 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247375870855 0.0443174109184 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.42419426049 95% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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