In modern society, competitive environment always exist in job maket. In order to apply for ideal occupation with high salary and comfortable working condition, a number of people are seeking opportunities to enhance their competitve ability. Some people refer to suggest that the ability to maintain good relationship with others is more vital than studying hard. Nevertheless, in my perspective, both of the abilities are benefical for applying, and people are supposed to cultivate there abilities together.
First of all, the ability to relate well to people is aspect of people's social feature. Human is a kind of animal that adapt to group life. Learning how to keep strong relationship with others is necessary in career. In future career, work is always assigned to a group to finish together, because this process increasingly develop company's efficiency. Then, the communication in group is vitally important. If the relationship between group members is not very well, the work connection is less. Then, working condition not only causes people exhausted, but also lower the efficiency. Besides, if people just focus on their own things and study alone, some necessary information can not be expressed in time. For example, in group working, you just concentrate on your own assignment, when you encounter some problems, you are not willing to asked for your members, owing to embarrassment of talking.
In addition, studying hard also a key element for success in a future job. Knowledge is true ability and it is always in your mind. A number of company need people with professional technique to make profits for company. At the same time, in group working, people with solid fundamental knowledge have vital status. If people in group lack some knowledge to solve problem, the whole schedule of project will be influenced.
Therefore, company tend to hire people who not only study hard, but also understand how to keep a well relationship with others.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, well, for example, in addition, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19811320755 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85871888164 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562893081761 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.180066154 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7368421053 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247026245593 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752068690925 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614728436674 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159137086955 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280263063206 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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