TPO 24 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Guidance from parents is important part of our lives. It is vital because young adults will be guided and molded to become a better person. Some people believe that parents can prepare their children in adulthood by motivating them to take a part time job. In my humble opinion, I think it is beneficial that at young age they are exposed in a part time job. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, involvement of children with a job can help them become more responsible individuals. Also, they will know how to handle their finances, such as paying some of their bills. For instance, my brother Mark is working on a pizza company, he was on his 1st year college. He did not need extra income but he told me that he wants to be independent and know how does it feel to earn an income. Mark learned valuable lessons in life that in every penny spend, needs carefully thinking whether spending the money with non important things is really needed in one's life. As a result, my brother become more thrifty and saves a lot because he learned the difficulty of earning money.
Secondly, teenagers getting part time job at young age can also have positive effect on their well being. Some people after their end of their summer job become more matured individual because they will get a real sense of what life really is and how hard is it to earn a living to buy essential things in life, so they know the value of money. For example, my cousin Rita does tutoring job at their school and help students who are having difficulties in subjects. She realized the importance of education that every good opportunity comes from finishing your studies in college. At that point, she wants to reach out to other students and teach as many pupils she can handle because she knows that you can be successful in life when you have a college degree. Rita uses her knowledge to help other people and make sure that everybody will be given a shot in their studies.
To summarize, I believe it is essential to be involved in summer job or part time job at a young age. This is because you will learn many life lessons and become responsible person in terms of finances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51990049751 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36393939226 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519900497512 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3736015341 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6315789474 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1578947368 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15789473684 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235472773783 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769098343605 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658055908446 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151903041521 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540986273153 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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