In the modern era, beside of having good knowledge, people should have good skills to be employed in a job. In addition, good relationship with people would have a specific rule in a future success. Many people adhere to the view that teenager should concentrate on their study major and lessons to be success in their future life, while others believe that they should have a part time job in order to be a responsible person in the future. Ego, when it comes to my stance, by weighting up the pros and cons, I firmly hold that persuade the youth to take a part time job would have a dramatic influence on their future life. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my view of point.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that it will learn them earning money is not as easiest as they thought. All the modern generation, just want to fulfil their desires and they do not know haw and from where their parents obtain money. Therefore, as they work by individual, they could easily realize their family. On the other hand having an income increase their self-confidence. My personal experience-compelling example of this. My father payed me 200 $ per month, I was not satisfied by this scenario, but as soon as I became 15 years old, my father found me a job that payed me 100$ per month. It was very enjoyable for me to earn money and I could manage my money after that time.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that having work experience play big role in our future life. The best things demand best baground. For instance, my pervious example could explain my claim better. After graduation of university, I could find my favorite job by high salary, while my classmates, which have no work experience, are still jobless.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, taking a job could have a great impact not only on children but also on any ages of people. It would lead the people among an independent life. The most successful leaders had the worst and intolerable life in the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 378, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... others believe that they should have a part time job in order to be a responsible person...
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Line 1, column 559, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... hold that persuade the youth to take a part time job would have a dramatic influence on ...
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Line 2, column 463, Rule ID: CURRENCY[2]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$200'.
Suggestion: $200
...ing example of this. My father payed me 200 $ per month, I was not satisfied by this ...
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Line 2, column 595, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$100'.
Suggestion: $100
... my father found me a job that payed me 100$ per month. It was very enjoyable for me...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, in brief, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1706.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67397260274 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71195750114 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561643835616 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6337126151 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7894736842 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2105263158 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52631578947 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00876371307828 0.236089414692 4% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00492077763028 0.076458572812 6% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0208770913865 0.0737576698707 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0102998203154 0.150856017488 7% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0178398120951 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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