Nowadays, by the advent of technology life become more individual. People are no dependent on social life as before. Everyone can answer to his own demands through the technical services and devices such as the internet and phones. In this regard, some controversies rise amongst people that young people do not give enough time to help their communities. I am personally in favor of this controversy. I cling to my viewpoint for three reasons and will illustrate them in the following.
The first aspect to be mentioned is young people were not taught to care about their community as much as it needed. To be more specific, teachers in school dedicate their time to teach scientific facts to the students. They are less concern about social problems and speak less about the importance of community these days. They prefer to go off the tangent about social issues and talk about scientific facts instead. Suppose one wants to talk about community, there is not enough time to dedicate to this matter in these days schools. To clarify my point, let me take myself as an example, during my study in high school, our teachers hardly spoke about social issues. They prefer to use their little time to talk about science and made us ready for the exams. The aim was to prepare the students to get good marks in exams, not anything further. As a result, I think the educational system has a great effect on this status.
Apart from the point discussed above, the modern young people have a little extra time in which, they prefer to think about themselves and enjoy their own lives. In other words, the youth are always busy with their job in order to be able to afford the cost of living in a modern city that leads to a fewer free time and also less energy to participate in social events. To clarify my point, take an employee as an example, he should work hard during long hours each day of the weak in order to afford his living, obviously, he has no energy or time to dedicate to the community.
The last but not the least, The youth think that it is the government responsibility to help the community. They believe they have no certain role in helping the community, thus the community's issues do not affect their lives and do not occupy their mind. To be more clear, they do not care about helping the community because they think it has nothing to do with them. They assume that it is not their concern, it is the government concern. For example, when an earthquake happens, everybody assumes that this s the government responsibility, not theirs.
All in all, considering the foregoing points and examples, I believe that a bending of circumstances and obligation leads to the fact that young people nowadays do not give enough time to help their communities and the blame is not on their own alone.
There are some needed materials that they did not gain when they grew up.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, thus, apart from, as to, for example, i think, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2379.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65557729941 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48078078561 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483365949119 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 742.5 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6927674301 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.16 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.44 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203050547619 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565148819459 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769576422315 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117026836728 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077292544593 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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