TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

Nowadays most of people, particularly young people hope to have a suitable job with high income. Having such jobs often determines our level of success in the society. Sometimes people couldn't find jobs that are their favorite or related to their studies. So they face with a dillema that if choose another and temporary job to work or wait to employ at their favorite career. Different people may have different reaction to this issue but in my point of view, they should expect to obtain their favorite job. I have lots of good reasons for my opinion but the most important of them are: they could progress more and they feel relax during these works which are satisfying for them.
First and foremost, people could have more chances to progress if they do work that they are satisfied with them. They could demonstrate their abilities and be more useful during work because they weren't compelled to choose this work. Also, maybe they have background information about this work that they were interested in obtaining that. For example me as a mechanical engineering student am keen to work in the automobile factory. Because from my childhood I was interested in this field and for that I have selected mechanical engineering as my study subject at university and I have passed more practical courses about designing and engine's performance. I am sure that I would be the success if I could employ at one of the popularized automobile factories.
On the other hand, if anyone chooses such works that s/he is interested in that, s/he feels relax. Some people during their works expect to finish their work time and aren't keen to stay at office or factory unlikely you could find workers who don't notice time and are involved with their work. You couldn't see them tired and they have the high efficiency that their factory or office is satisfied with their works.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
Nowadays most of people, particularly young people hope to have...
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Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...uccess in the society. Sometimes people couldnt find jobs that are their favorite or re...
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Line 1, column 660, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...hey feel relax during these works which are satisfying for them. First and foremost, people c...
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Line 2, column 197, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...be more useful during work because they werent compelled to choose this work. Also, ma...
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Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...ks expect to finish their work time and arent keen to stay at office or factory unlik...
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Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ory unlikely you could find workers who dont notice time and are involved with their...
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Line 3, column 299, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...e and are involved with their work. You couldnt see them tired and they have the high e...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'for example', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.206997084548 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.183673469388 0.158761421928 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0962099125364 0.0866891130778 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0233236151603 0.046263068375 50% => OK
Pronouns: 0.116618075802 0.0685040099705 170% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.137026239067 0.118717715034 115% => OK
Participles: 0.0379008746356 0.0351676179071 108% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.43842265165 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0320699708455 0.0309702414327 104% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0583090379009 0.0887237588012 66% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0233236151603 0.0209618222197 111% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00874635568513 0.0139019557991 63% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1867.0 2387.08602151 78% => OK
No of words: 321.0 408.028673835 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.81619937695 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48200974243 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.308411214953 0.338922669872 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.224299065421 0.251872472559 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.14953271028 0.174417080927 86% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.105919003115 0.112833075102 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43842265165 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507788161994 0.524397521467 97% => OK
Word variations: 51.9838450042 59.2087087015 88% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 21.4 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.84387619 48.84282405 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.466666667 120.699889404 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.533333333333 0.644075263715 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.5376344086 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 43.8299065421 45.7405998639 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.18018018018 1.45489161554 81% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297869840253 0.300154397459 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.161142608176 0.103427244359 156% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.100192217658 0.0752933317313 133% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.48144531947 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.113927202579 0.151897553556 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122673325427 0.114077575197 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463451595646 0.0781384742642 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.363107187355 0.336927656856 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0330437646242 0.067059652881 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217374225294 0.210909579961 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396247661289 0.0618886996521 64% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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