TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

Not surprisingly, unemployment has been recognized as one of the cardinal challenges in today's human society which people have to overcome in the 21st century. It has been argued that job seekers should grab any opportunity with the secure environment instead of being waited for a career accompanied with a high level of job satisfaction. While I believe it can be not generalized to all cases, I tend to agree on it based on the following concerns.

The first point to support such a view is that job satisfaction has included a wide range of factors, which being secure can be regarded as one of the most appealing ones. In fact, being employment on that environment that has provided a great salary, different promotion, and repeated work appreciation seems alluring for all applicants. However, due to the high rate of unemployment, economic recession, and company downsizing, finding a job that at least fulfills one of the satisfaction factors is required comprehensive considering. In essence, there is no guarantee to having a decent job with all mentioned advantage.

Moreover, both employees and employers can take advantage from recruiting permanent tenure. Firstly, a secure job environment has paved the way for workers to discover and explore the potential of the job growth. Needless to say, fear of losing a job and stressful environment are considered as the huge barriers for the temporary computer manufacture's staffs, as an example, to remark their novel thoughts or interests. In this regard, it can make employees less motivated as well as pose a threat to the productivity of the whole company. Consequently choosing a secure job not only has played a critical role in one's state of relief but also kept the job environment more dynamic and flourishing.

Despite these facts, being employed in a secure job might not mean that workers have to satisfied with lower rank occupation and avoid making an effort for a better condition. In fact, working and gaining experience in a real workplace always provide a good account for seekers to know what aspects of a job need attention. In addition, the applicant might have a higher social circle which leads to introduce a new opportunity for a better career .Instead, waiting a long time without any endeavor can cause one to lose motivation or feel depressed.

From what have been discussed, taking up instantaneously a secure job can have different advantages. As it was mentioned, people spontaneously have a wide perception of a high-rank job satisfaction but based on today's environment they should grab what job market has been offered to help themselves, and society as well.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Suggestion: Consequently,
... the productivity of the whole company. Consequently choosing a secure job not only has play...
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Suggestion: one's
... not only has played a critical role in ones state of relief but also kept the job e...
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...ce a new opportunity for a better career .Instead, waiting a long time without any...
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Suggestion: Instead
... a new opportunity for a better career .Instead, waiting a long time without any endeav...
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Line 9, column 212, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...high-rank job satisfaction but based on todays environment they should grab what job m...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'at least', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'as well as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.242677824268 0.229887763892 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.186192468619 0.158761421928 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0857740585774 0.0866891130778 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0439330543933 0.046263068375 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0209205020921 0.0685040099705 31% => OK
Prepositions: 0.110878661088 0.118717715034 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0878661087866 0.0351676179071 250% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 3.03919969038 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0313807531381 0.0309702414327 101% => OK
Particles: 0.00209205020921 0.00188951952338 111% => OK
Determiners: 0.112970711297 0.0887237588012 127% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0209205020921 0.0209618222197 100% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0167364016736 0.0139019557991 120% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2661.0 2387.08602151 111% => OK
No of words: 437.0 408.028673835 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.08924485126 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48200974243 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.368421052632 0.338922669872 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.288329519451 0.251872472559 114% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.224256292906 0.174417080927 129% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.1647597254 0.112833075102 146% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03919969038 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551487414188 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 65.1054720247 59.2087087015 110% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 25.7058823529 20.5533526081 125% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1457656489 48.84282405 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.529411765 120.699889404 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7058823529 20.5533526081 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.882352941176 0.644075263715 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 54.538834298 45.7405998639 119% => OK
Elegance: 1.75833333333 1.45489161554 121% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313374767992 0.300154397459 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0903541691324 0.103427244359 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0404553500699 0.0752933317313 54% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.552803118713 0.497263757937 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130430500679 0.151897553556 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127408533502 0.114077575197 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496979464664 0.0781384742642 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.297847452097 0.336927656856 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0934753679864 0.067059652881 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206279320525 0.210909579961 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382830185657 0.0618886996521 62% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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