Many people think that secure job is the most appealing job for them. they say that secure job gives them the feeling of safety which is very important for them. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that the satisfying job is more important because it gives satisfaction and it is more appealing.
First, satisfaction is the most important factor in making the employee's production and happiness always up. Simply if the employee is not satisfied with the job, will not put a great effort to keep the work run, will not care enough about the company or even about the quality of the product. For example, I used to work as a pharmacist in Egypt. I love my job, although it doesn't provide me with a good financial compensation, I really enjoy it. Helping people and seeing their smiles usually makes my day. This gives me a full satisfaction, as a result, I spend a lot of time at work, I sacrifice my days off and stay at work, I got loved by most of the customers. The big benefit was increasing the pharmacy' s customers number and increasing the sales and the profits. On the other hand, there was a pharmacy technician who used to work with me at the same pharmacy. He worked there just to get money which secures his income for a time. He comes to the work just because he has to come. He counts the minutes till he can go home. The job doesn't satisfy his personality. He didn't give his effort to the work. As a conclusion, being satisfied with the job provide happiness for the employee and more profit to the employer.
Second, it is more appealing to do the job that really fits the employee's personality even if it is not stable, rather than doing a job because it is just a secure one. The appealing job secures the happiness and the satisfaction, which is more important than securing money. This type of work always keeps the employee at a high production rate and ability to work more. Plus it will be always appealing to him. A person may get bored of doing the same job and routine day after day, but this boring will be reduced to the minimum if this job appeals him.
In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I encourage each person to work the job that satisfies his personality. Why you do not try this for your next career. If you did so, you will discover for yourself how much happiness will be in your heart, and how active you will be. You will never regret this decision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...job is the most appealing job for them. they say that secure job gives them the feel...
^^^^
Line 2, column 65, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...the most important factor in making the employees production and happiness always up. Sim...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 376, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...st in Egypt. I love my job, although it doesnt provide me with a good financial compen...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 993, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...o the work just because he has to come. He counts the minutes till he can go home....
^^
Line 2, column 1044, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...he minutes till he can go home. The job doesnt satisfy his personality. He didnt give ...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1079, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... job doesnt satisfy his personality. He didnt give his effort to the work. As a concl...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...ling to do the job that really fits the employees personality even if it is not stable, r...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: BORED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'bored with'?
Suggestion: bored with
...ways appealing to him. A person may get bored of doing the same job and routine day afte...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, really, second, so, as to, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44444444444 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51323803729 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471111111111 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.234981886 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0740740741 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92592592593 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232370883648 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696594635421 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631284359616 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163000014286 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450848477512 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 11.7677419355 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.