TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task

Both the reading and the lecture are about ways to decrease the birds' injuries from the glass buildings and windows. The author of the reading provides three ways that help with reducing the injuries. While the lecturer cast doubts on the effectiveness of those solutions.
First, the author mentions the one-way glass as a solution. As it is stated in the article, this will help in building people to see the outside, at the same time birds, can't see through it, so they will consider it as a barrier and avoid it. The lecturer, on the other hand, doesn't agree. He says the one-way glass will reflect as a mirror from outside. Birds can see the sky reflection on the glass and think it is the sky and try to fly through or see a tree on the reflecting glass and think it is a real one so they try to land on it. This will lead to birds injuries as well.
Second, the author conducts that glass with colorful designs will solve the problem. With colorful designs or strips on the glass, people will still be able to see through the plain parts. Birds will see the colores and will try to avoid them. The lecturer rebuts on this. He says the birds will see the plain parts of the glass as holes. They will try to fly through those holes which will lead to injur them. The solution to this is to make the plain parts very small, but this will make the rooms inside the building so dark.
Third, the author mentions the use of the magnetic field as a very good solution. As it is illustrated, birds use the earth's magnetic field to determine their direction while flying. Architecture can use the magnetic field as a tool to keep the birds far from hutting those building. The lecturer is totally against this solution. He says that birds use the magnetic field only on long trips as traveling from north to south, but on small trips like across a city or something like that, they use their eyes. The eyes that can't distinguish between glass and empty space. So this is not a good solution.

Votes
Average: 6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s that help with reducing the injuries. While the lecturer cast doubts on the effecti...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 171, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ee the outside, at the same time birds, cant see through it, so they will consider i...
^^^^
Line 2, column 277, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...id it. The lecturer, on the other hand, doesnt agree. He says the one-way glass will r...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 559, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'bird'.
Suggestion: bird
...ey try to land on it. This will lead to birds injuries as well. Second, the author c...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 523, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...hat, they use their eyes. The eyes that cant distinguish between glass and empty spa...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, second, so, still, third, well, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 22.412803532 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 30.3222958057 165% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 368.0 270.72406181 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41576086957 5.08290768461 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19700876892 2.5805825403 85% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421195652174 0.540411800872 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.9 419.366225166 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.55342163355 84% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 13.0662251656 176% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.2519850996 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.652173913 110.228320801 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 21.698381199 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95652173913 7.06452816374 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.27373068433 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.480215035291 0.272083759551 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133457214123 0.0996497079465 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898477911305 0.0662205650399 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274782229189 0.162205337803 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891986861745 0.0443174109184 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 13.3589403974 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 53.8541721854 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 11.0289183223 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.06 12.2367328918 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.4 8.42419426049 76% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 63.6247240618 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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