TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

Career plays an important role in human life. Choosing a job is a vital decision for everyone because it has an effect in whole life. People have a different opinion about what job is the best. While some may think they should choose a secure job, I believe that a job should be more satisfying.
First, people have more progress when a job is satisfying. When people like their job, they are more motivated to do their job in the best way. Also, they tend to thrive in their skills and their knowledge to improve their position in their office. Besides, by expending their abilities, they have other opportunities in society for finding a better job with a higher salary. However, if people have a chance to get a secure job and take it right away without paying attention it is pleasant for them or not, maybe they get bored and do not have a motivation for doing that in the best way. As a result, they will not improve their skills.
Second, by having a pleasant job, people have a better mood. When people are satisfied with what they are doing, They will have a better feeling. They are proud of themselves. They also have less stress and anxiety at work. As a result, they have a better life. However, By doing a job which is unpleasant, they get boring. All the times, they are waiting when the time is over and they can go home. They have more stress too. Because, when they have a bad mood at work, they do not accomplish their work accurately. So, they are worried about their mistakes. For instance, my brother found a job which was a secure job. After a month, my brother got boring and he said he did not like it. He finally quit that job and after a year found a job that he liked it. He is successful in his job now.
To sum up, I believed one of the major characteristics of jobs is people like their job. Because a satisfying job causes more progress and more healthy.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 46, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...t, people have more progress when a job is satisfying. When people like their job, they are m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, for instance, as a result, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.375 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33812168557 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474431818182 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 484.2 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4661188165 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 59.2307692308 100.406767564 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.5384615385 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345671980664 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115788369258 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0755995694437 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23120488685 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386723854041 0.0645574589148 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.0 11.7677419355 51% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.53 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.75 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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