TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex

The important determinant of choosing a job is satisfaction. Some people believe that people should take the secure job abruptly when they get it. Nevertheless, others think it will be better to wait until they find the work they do with a favor. From my point of view, people should get the job that is engaging to them whether it is secure or not.

Above all, without any hope and aspiration, people could not succeed. Because the effort and hard work is the result of the person's hard work. Also, I think that happiness is the result of being an excellent worker. Even though how much money they earn, people fell uncomfortable during the work time if they do not really appeal with it. Moreover, the secure job keeps the person's safety but taking a risk is sometimes makes life more engaging to live. For example, my father was a wealthy engineer. Nonetheless, he altered his job into an amateur teacher because it is the dream of his childhood and bring a happiness to his life.

Another reason is, even though how secure the job is, it may cause a health problem to a person because of the lack of happiness. The health is the main basis of human life and the only thing that keeps human healthy is, of course, cheerfulness. I think if the person does not want to do the job, it causes a stress which brings a serious disease. From my own experience, because my father requires me to study geography which is optional in school. Because I feel uncomfortable, I did not study for it and always got bad scores on the exams.

All in all, everyone lives once, do not waste the valuable time in useless stuff such as money. The only reason why we live in this world is to feel satisfaction.

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Average: 6 (2 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, really, so, for example, i feel, i think, of course, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1402.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50803858521 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45438108653 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546623794212 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.0052077683 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 77.8888888889 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2777777778 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223433809504 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672933397723 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064864803161 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134057371223 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10205458367 0.0645574589148 158% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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