In our fast-changing world, jobs take a bolder position in one’s life than the past. Jobs are a serious part of the life that affect even personal issues inadvertantly. Thus, finding a suitable job is a vital decision in everyone’s life. A question that can be raised in this regard is that which type of jobs should be considered more. One standpoint believes that the security of job should has a higher priority to accept it rather than the satisfying aspect of the job. I refudiate this idea and in the ensuing lines, I delve into two reasons to substantiate my point.
The first reason is that if people’s job doesn’t satisfy them, they couldn’t stand for a long time whether the job has a high security or not. Since jobs and thier features play a significant role in people daily lifes, choosing dissatisfying job makes all part of your life unhappy. Jobs features like working hours, salary, business environments, etc all can ruin the whole things if doesn’t match. Take, for instance, you get the job that its working hours doesn’t fit with your life and you can’t be with your family or having fun with your friends. As times go, you feel alone and thus you will show some irrational behaviour such as angryness, hateress and depression. Therfore, you can’t do your job as well as your boss expect and you need to resign or get fired eventually. All other factors mentioned above could bring the same scenario and finally, not only don’t you have a job but also your mental health is hurt through this sad expreince.
Secondly, learning process and seeing future in jobs are a critical part of the decision making that don’t get their attention if you value job security more. People don’t want to change their job frequently. So it is important that you increase your knowledge and improve your skill to get the higher position in your current job. But if you don’t like your job and it doesn’t arouse your passion you will not have enough interest to improve your self and you probebly will stick in your current position. In additon, you couldn’t either change your field or change your current job as you got older and lost your apportunities. One of my family member did the same things for a years just because of the fear of loosing his job. He said to me “If I had my chance to get a job again, I would find the one that encourage me to reach my goals”.
In summary, all the aforementioned ideas bring us to the conclusion that although job security is important, people should consider job satisfaction first and with this criteria they have more chance to get suitable jobs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 404, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...elieves that the security of job should has a higher priority to accept it rather t...
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Line 3, column 245, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to dissatisfy'.
Suggestion: to dissatisfy
...nt role in people daily lifes, choosing dissatisfying job makes all part of your life unhappy...
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Line 5, column 704, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a year' or simply 'years'?
Suggestion: a year; years
...y family member did the same things for a years just because of the fear of loosing his...
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Line 7, column 165, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...onsider job satisfaction first and with this criteria they have more chance to get s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, in summary, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82683982684 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7645226367 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517316017316 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3102664981 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.19047619 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2380952381 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273481969828 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103670733635 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576949041067 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207354674402 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031825801906 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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