TPO 28-
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
children'e education is one of the most critical concerns of the human fmily and society. Needless to say that a perfect education could increase chance of great and comfort life in the future. Some people may find it so hard to obesrve their children education countinously whereas others would take the reverse. Even though some may put this responsibility to teachers hand since they find it really fruastrating. Nevertheless, I firmly of the belief that parents role is infinitely preferable. The following underlying reasons are going to substantiate my stand-ponts.
The first fact that holds me this concept is that easily internet observation for children education from the past. It can be illustrated that recent lives are under undeniable comfort since new technologies are becoming widespread. In fact, people could obesrve the entire children grades only with one click on the network. For example, when I was persuading my family business at the bakery equipment distribution company a few years ago, I realized from perfect method to considerable involving of my employment on his children school. He watch full HD of his boys in the class and shows me too. As we watching his child I see the another data in the screen which was the boy's remark from the first of the semester and that was wonderfully easy and impressive. Thus, it can be seen this comforable opportunity wouldn't accur if the internet and new thecnologies wouldn't exist.
Another reason is that education is now play an essential role in the future career. I read several articles about engineers roles on the society at the Iranian science journal three months ago. They analyze the various impacts of the higher education on human life; hence, they assume that its effects are undeniable. On of the articles estimates that robots will become common within 20 years; therefore, people should learn more high science in order to obtain a good job. I can remember my personal similar experience when I was studying the power electricals at the Sharif university ten years ago, I can remember the various impact of the education not as important as it is today. So becoming expert is one of the most crucial thing for getting a job. Thus, it can seems reasonable to assume from this experience higher education will play essential role in the future and students should prepare for it.
In conclusion, though some may oppose the concept, parents should perfectly involve in their child's education life. Not only because it would become more easy, but also higher education alter to first of career decision maker. Every person should make more afford to increase children's education since the world need our better awarness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Childrene
childrene education is one of the most critical c...
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Line 3, column 544, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'watches'.
Suggestion: watches
...y employment on his children school. He watch full HD of his boys in the class and sh...
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Line 3, column 815, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...can be seen this comforable opportunity wouldnt accur if the internet and new thecnolog...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...ur if the internet and new thecnologies wouldnt exist. Another reason is that educati...
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Line 5, column 41, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'played'.
Suggestion: played
...Another reason is that education is now play an essential role in the future career....
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Line 5, column 773, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'seem'
Suggestion: seem
...l thing for getting a job. Thus, it can seems reasonable to assume from this experien...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, thus, whereas, for example, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04910714286 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69035262553 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551339285714 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 712.8 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0193108122 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.347826087 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4782608696 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26086956522 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142602450784 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0411346404211 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363228305165 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0957416089384 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403424167178 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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