TPO-30: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no doubt that it is important for workers have time to relax themselves, views differ considerably when it comes tp the issue of whether it is more enjoyable for works should work only three days a week for a long time than work five days a week for shorter hours. Some people contend that it is better to work three days a week because we will have four days spare to travel or relax at home, while others assert that if workers work a short time everyday, they will not have so much pressure to finish the project because they have enough time a week. Both opposite arguments appeal to be convincing and stand to reason. however, my experience have let me to believe that it is more enjoyable to work five days a week.
To begin with, working five days a week is good for our health, workers will have the pressure to finish the tasks due to the fact that there is enough time for them, however, if workers have to finish the task in three days, they need to get up early and work to the night, sometimes they may not have time to eat food so they may choose to eat fast food which could cause great damage to their body. Accordingly, working five days a week for shorter hours is good for people's health, people could have a health lifestyle and enjoy a happy work time.
Another reason drives me to indicate is that working five days a week is more efficient. For instance, I used to review the books for a long hours a day to prepare for the final exam, but I can not get a good grade everytime, then I talk to my math teacher and he told me I have to adjust my study plan owing to the fact that I am too tired to study the knowledge efficient, in other words, I just waste a lot of time, hence, I listening to his idea and in the next semast, I got the highest grade in the class.
To put it in a nutshell, based on aforementioned analysis, I must reinforce my idea that it is more enjoyable to work five days a week for a shorter time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 458, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ssert that if workers work a short time everyday, they will not have so much pressure to...
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Line 1, column 633, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...l to be convincing and stand to reason. however, my experience have let me to believe t...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re enjoyable to work five days a week. To begin with, working five days a week ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lifestyle and enjoy a happy work time. Another reason drives me to indicate is ...
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Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'hour'?
Suggestion: hour
..., I used to review the books for a long hours a day to prepare for the final exam, bu...
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Line 3, column 431, Rule ID: I_AM[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
...rds, I just waste a lot of time, hence, I listening to his idea and in the next s...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... I got the highest grade in the class. To put it in a nutshell, based on aforem...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, hence, however, if, may, so, then, while, for instance, no doubt, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.15831134565 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22145099162 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467018469657 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 20.1344086022 209% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 127.311613428 48.9658058833 260% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 175.111111111 100.406767564 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.1111111111 20.6045352989 204% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.5555555556 5.45110844103 230% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394042881482 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.209739268495 0.076458572812 274% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0987532831505 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265226442919 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759740053214 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 11.7677419355 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.23 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.1 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.74 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 86.8835125448 54% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 10.002688172 265% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.0537634409 187% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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