TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec

Contemporary world has brought some significant changes in our lives, and with them, the lack of time. It is not difficult to know someone who spend more time working than doing other activities, like spending time with the family and friends, enjoying their hobbies or even taking care of their own health. In light of this, this essay will talk about why is more enjoyable to have a job where you work for long three-days-period in order to enjoy time in a healthier and beneficial way.
First, working for three days a week would allow a longer time of interaction with family and friends. Usually due to unavailability, some basic activities end up being left aside, like having lunch, travel or even watch a movie together with those who are important to us. For example, when my father changed his schedule working two consecutive days and not working the next two, we started to enjoy simple moments that we did not have for a long time, such as go to the beach to see the Sunrise.
Second, having more days available during the week can be a great opportunity to enjoy a hobby. After a full work week, we probably are less motivated and willing to do something, and with more time available, we could do an activity that we usually would not be able to do. I always wanted to practice Yoga, however, they only had morning classes. When I changed my schedule, I was able to start practicing, which made me healthier and less stressed.
As last, change a work schedule can enable us to have more time to take care of ourselves. Working during the whole week can increase stress, anxiety and unhealthy behaviors, and changing it can significantly improve your life quality. With a simply schedule change, I had the opportunity to attend my nutritionist and psychologist more frequently, resulting in an improvement in my physical and mental health.
To sum up, these are one of the many reasons why I rather work only three days for long hours than five days for shorter hours. The changes are noticeable: more time with our family and friends, the opportunity of practice a new activity and, consequently, a better life quality, and these things no job can buy.

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Average: 9.8 (4 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 241, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('simply') instead an adjective, or a noun ('schedule') instead of another adjective.
...icantly improve your life quality. With a simply schedule change, I had the opportunity to attend...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, second, so, for example, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71240105541 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67680148394 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55672823219 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.3882020892 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.066666667 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2666666667 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13333333333 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341647035034 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113197567685 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0996927560654 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192477763597 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604724331405 0.0645574589148 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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