Many people think that the quick change in the world make them more satisfied. They say that every thing around them change for their beneficent and to make the life more easily. For example they have the smart phones in their hands and those machine has millions of applications that make the life more easily like they can call for a ride with just a touch on their phones' screens. Also with a touch to the screen they can control the temperature of their houses while they are at work .... and so on. Although I understand their point of view, I have different opinion. I believe that the quick change in the life rhythm made the people less satisfied because this made them more stressed and more isolated.
First, people became more stressed as the world change so fast around them because they can't keep it up with the world. For more illustration, In the past when the computer was a new invention, it was a fancy thing that only rich people can have it. Few years later, regular people start to have computers at their houses and it was almost the same make and model in most of the houses. Few years after, there was an invasion of different models with different features that help with different professionals. People couldn't keep it up because once they update their computers or laptops, a newer version with more fascinating updates becomes available. The same thing with cell phone, and now with the google home devices which day after day has much more attracting features. People are drained, they spend a lot of money to keep getting the up to date machines but even though they can't catch up with the pace of the updates and changing happening, this make them feel less satisfied as they can't afford to have all the new things always as they used to have in the past.
Second, people become more isolated as the world change so quick. They become busy keeping eyes on the updates more than keeping eyes on their own life. This made the life more hard. For instance, people now are busy working to get more money so they can buy whatever the new versions of the devices or cars they want to possess. Also they become more busy learning new things and new courses in their working fields to keep themselves up to date always and to be more competitive in the working market. This all made each person live in their own world with less social events and less sports to do. This all led to less communication with the people around them. As a result every person feels lonely and isolated.
In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above I encourage each person to not be derivine with the quick changes happens around, instead focus on the positive things of these changes. If you did so, you will discover for your self that life is more enjoyable with the people around and less stressful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2306.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 504.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5753968254 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20294693502 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.0 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.4018214274 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0833333333 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91666666667 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254607987885 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926792341966 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656600989732 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183785238957 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133946194915 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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