TOEFL T P O 4 - Integrated Writing Task

Both the reading and the lecture are about dinosaurs. The author of the reading believes that the dinosaurs were endothermal animals (keep their body temperature the same with the change in the outer climate) providing three supporting reasons. On the other hand, the lecturer insists that dinosaurs were not endothermal and provides three reasons why she thinks this way.

First, the author of the reading points out that dinosaurs fossils had been discovered in the polar area. Only endothermal animals can live in the polar area due to the weather there. The lecturer challenges this point, she says it is right dinosaurs used to live in the polar, but the weather back then when dinosaurs lived was much warmer, it was warm enough for the non-endothermal animals to live there. Also during the cold periods, the animals may migrate or hibernated. Which means dinosaurs weren't for sure endothermal animals.
Second, the author of the reading contends that the endothermal animals' leg positions are usually underneath their bodies to help them run and sustain physical activity. Dinosaurs had their legs under their bodies not on the side like reptiles. The lecturer rebuts on this. She says dinosaurs needed their legs to be under their body so it can help with baring their weight and support their growing bodies. This was mainly the beneficiary thing from hading their legs under their bodies.
Third, the author of the reading mentions that endothermal animals have this Haversian canal that holds nerves and blood vessels and allows the rapid growth of the animals. The fossils of the dinosaurs are dense with those Haversian canals. The lecturer opposes that. She says that although dinosaurs had these Haversian canals, they also have growth rings, that show times of rapid growth, times of slow growth and times of no growth. When scientists studied those growth rings, they found the times of no growth were in the cold seasons of the year which is a good indicator that dinosaurs were not endothermal animals.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... non-endothermal animals to live there. Also during the cold periods, the animals ma...
^^^^
Line 3, column 501, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...te or hibernated. Which means dinosaurs werent for sure endothermal animals. Second,...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, may, second, so, then, third, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 22.412803532 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1373.03311258 123% => OK
No of words: 334.0 270.72406181 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07185628743 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38220270789 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48502994012 0.540411800872 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 500.4 419.366225166 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 3.25607064018 246% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.9273459335 49.2860985944 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1111111111 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5555555556 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61111111111 7.06452816374 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.3589403974 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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