tpo 32. Are people less happy than they were in the past?
Without no doubt, people are the corner stone of any successful society. In this regard, one’s mental health enjoys a vital role in bringing about prosperous in any community. With this in mind, there are different viewpoints about the level of happiness in the past in comparison to that of the present time. While some believe that it stands in reason that people are happier today, others hold the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, the first point carries the more weight for several reasons, three substantial of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The most compelling reason is that nowadays, our lifestyle has been affected by galloping rate of technological arrival offering more convenience life, which enhances happiness--or, to put in in another way, the more individuals life are comfortable, the more they are happier. The invention of computers has people a chance not only to get rid of some types of boring things, but also to accelerate their work. For instance, when I was in high school, I worked part-time in a library, whenever I wanted to type an official letter, I was required to push the bottoms of an old-fashion typing machine by my fingers, which was time consuming and boring, the invention of computers made my work much faster and easier.
Another reason of why I do not concur with the first perspective in the introductory paragraph, lies in the fact that in today's modern world, along with other changes, the knowledge has widely developed in every aspects, which has led to considerable progressing in medical field. Many diseases which are seemed to be highly difficult to deal with in the past such as depression, are now curable and easy to heal. Easy access to the state-of-the-art hospitals and skilled doctors makes people less worry about diseases that increases the level of happiness.
Last but not least, it is crystal clear that educational has a pivotal role in preparing one for future, and eagerness to learn new things is inherent in all of human beings. In the past, educational system was poor, and had no attention to children's need. There was not skillful teachers and no proper educational system in which children could complete their educations and pursue their interests. Consequently, most of individuals could not be ones they liked, they did not mostly like their careers, which caused dissatisfaction. On the other hand, nowadays, children can study in the well-equipped schools and under efficient educational system, which assist them to continue their education in an appropriate manner, giving them an opportunity to seek their fortunes, which is the key factor for happiness and well-being.
To put it in a nutshell, having considered all of the aforementioned ingredients discussed above, I do believe that nowadays, individuals are happier on the grounds that they enjoy more convenient life, thanks to technological development and knowledge advancement, and more effective educational system.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: most of the individuals; most individuals
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'for instance', 'no doubt', 'such as', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.21778584392 0.229887763892 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.145190562613 0.158761421928 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.121597096189 0.0866891130778 140% => OK
Adverbs: 0.043557168784 0.046263068375 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0453720508167 0.0685040099705 66% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125226860254 0.118717715034 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0308529945554 0.0351676179071 88% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.98807193151 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0308529945554 0.0309702414327 100% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0907441016334 0.0887237588012 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.005444646098 0.0209618222197 26% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0235934664247 0.0139019557991 170% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2987.0 2387.08602151 125% => OK
No of words: 484.0 408.028673835 119% => OK
Chars per words: 6.17148760331 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.376033057851 0.338922669872 111% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.28305785124 0.251872472559 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.214876033058 0.174417080927 123% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.163223140496 0.112833075102 145% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98807193151 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555785123967 0.524397521467 106% => OK
Word variations: 68.1105065774 59.2087087015 115% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 28.4705882353 20.5533526081 139% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.9633133874 48.84282405 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 175.705882353 120.699889404 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4705882353 20.5533526081 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.705882352941 0.644075263715 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 56.7763733593 45.7405998639 124% => OK
Elegance: 1.59689922481 1.45489161554 110% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261333824985 0.300154397459 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130953888799 0.103427244359 127% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0660159576352 0.0752933317313 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.575860140178 0.497263757937 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.156886387024 0.151897553556 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117546938906 0.114077575197 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531271882792 0.0781384742642 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.358206310399 0.336927656856 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0583844093348 0.067059652881 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18194672748 0.210909579961 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643564953934 0.0618886996521 104% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
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Rates: 76 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23 Out of 30