TPO 32- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this generation, people are more outspoken in their belief system and they are concern with the betterment of their society. In my humble opinion, I believe that young people has great impact in our world. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, teenagers are active in community affairs compared in the past generations whose daily routine are to support only their family well being. Many organizations are run by young adults and they have their way to let other people get involved with their community projects. This projects helps the people in their society to help rebuilding of their nation. For example, in my hometown in Paranaque, youth organized a drive for tree replanting in our city parks. The children's vision and dreams are to rehabilitate our park due to our hometown are a suffering from air pollution. In this act, the future of our community would benefit and other citizens will have awareness with the environment and help our city rebuild into a healthier and greener community. This example illustrates that children has a voice in their community and are wanting their society to be a better place to live in.
Secondly, young people are not afraid to speak out their minds and want to share their knowledge to other people. In the advancement of technology, social media is a great tool to spread awareness to other people with regards to good social causes in our world. For instance, my friend Amy has a fund raising campaign which will support the victims of yolanda typhoon. Her mission is to help them to survive their everyday circumstances in life. As a typhoon victim, they have no shelter to live, no source of food, no monetary mean to buy things they want. Amy raised 500,000 pesos the proceed with go to rebuild a temporary housing and food package for each family that can last for 1 week. In addition, through Amy's advocacy towards lending a hand to the Yolanda victims, other group of people conducted their fund raising campaign in order to raise additional money for the typhoon victims.
To summarize, I believe that our young generation has way to help the society be better. This is because they are active in social affairs in the community and can share awareness to other people in rebuilding the society. Also, the youth are advocates for greener environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 300, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'help'.
Suggestion: help
...their community projects. This projects helps the people in their society to help reb...
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Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to rebuild' or 'rebuild'.
Suggestion: to rebuild; rebuild
...lps the people in their society to help rebuilding of their nation. For example, in my hom...
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Line 3, column 499, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...our city parks. The childrens vision and dreams are to rehabilitate our park due ...
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Line 3, column 848, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...dren has a voice in their community and are wanting their society to be a better place to l...
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Line 5, column 584, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ngs they want. Amy raised 500,000 pesos the proceed with go to rebuild a temporary housing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1974.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83823529412 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53460763646 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2398566966 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100725747022 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0336115895016 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0245745954775 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0650302738349 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0168274292303 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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