TPO 32 independent
do children have an important impact on the future of their countries?
Teenagers and adolescents have always been considered as the most significant part of the normal distribution diagram of a society. In this context, there are mutually exclusive ideas regarding whether they are the main determinants of the future of a country or not. In my point of view, I am completely inclined to the opinion that their decisions are momentous for each country. My notion to this controversial bone of contention is twofold, and in the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that they will be the main workforces (and knowledge workers) of the future. Thus, what they study and what they are mostly prone to are really critical in determining the destiny of their society. Considering Norway, for instance, thirty years ago its baby boys were mostly wanted to play with car toys; afterwards, statistically speaking, most of its college graduated students asked to be engineers in diverse majors, such as mechanical and civil engineering. As a result, this country, today, is well-known for its renowned engineers all over the world. Not only its adults have made a fortune for themselves and their families, but also their country has been gaining profits from their contribution to the Scandinavian region. This example clearly illustrates that the educational ascpect of kids' decisions is dramatically important for a country, mainly becuase it will set the macro goals and objectives of it.
The second equally far-reaching explanation to bear in mind is that the choices of these generation's hobbies are thoroughly inter-related to the health condition of their society. To put it into a more vivid picture, teenagers in Iran are used to playing video games for at least 4 hours per day. Regardless of the amount of time wasted on this useless hobby in their pastime, this choice have made obesity one of the most challenging issues that the government has underwent for the last ten years. On the other hand, young generation in Denmark are getting used to reading more as a main part of their daily routines. Therefore, Danish researchers have announced that the obesity rate of their country will have experienced an exponential decrease by the end of 2050. Comparing these two case studies, it is concluded that hobby selection of teenagers can affect their country both financially and physically insomuch as it will determines which situations the governments have to invest more on.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned rationalizations and facts into account, I believe that young children have a momentous impact on the future of their societies. To recapitulate my beliefs, teenagers and adolescents not only determine the future of their countries' working situation by selecting their majors but also affect the total health condition of their society due to their hobby selection.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 467, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'undergone'.
Suggestion: undergone
...llenging issues that the government has underwent for the last ten years. On the other ha...
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Line 5, column 581, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...enmark are getting used to reading more as a main part of their daily routines. Th...
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Line 5, column 932, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'determine'
Suggestion: determine
...ally and physically insomuch as it will determines which situations the governments have t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, well, at least, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2472.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20421052632 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9493226604 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551578947368 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 770.4 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.1813721732 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.333333333 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3888888889 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.55555555556 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222868269849 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685127164717 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709329406874 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146052787405 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743996133348 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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