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TPO 12, independent
focusing on one thing is better than knowing basic things about diverse majors.

Learning new and useful majors is substantially important for an individual's future success in both academic and working environments. In this context, there are mutually exclusive ideas regarding whether learning various things is more profitable or focusing on one specific subject. From my point of view, I am inclined to the latter idealization although the former has more aficionados among adults. My answer to this debating bone of contention is twofold. In the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.

The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that becoming professional in one particular subject will cause more job offers in future, mainly because challenging jobs require experts not people who have a rudimentary knowledge about the problems. Moreover, professionalism will cause more money to be eraned. To put it into a more vivid picture, let us compare Norway education strategy and Egypt's. In Norway, the main goal is to develop professionals in any major; thus, the contents which are taught to the students gradually become specialized on exactly "one" helping the students to be experts. As a result, Norwegians are known for their expertise in diverse professions, especially mechanical engineering. Norwegian engineers are the most demanded seasoned experts who usually ask for the highest wages because of their high level of professionalism. On the other hand, Egyptians are popular for their specific behavior of suggesting on almost every problem, such as politics and economics. This is mainly due to their educational system which does not offer professional studies to students. Moreover, researchers of RMIT, a renowned university in Australia, conducted a survey of Melbourne's employees. They realized that there is an inclination of this notion which is profitable for individuals. The predicted that professionalism attributes will have increased for 20% by the end of 2050 which shows the urge of employers searching for experts.

The second and aqually far-reaching explanation to bear in mind is that an individual can teach their experience to others as the know every details of a job and can prepare them as their assistants. As an illustration, my cousin. Ali, is a well-known civil engineer in my city, Kerman. When he was in high school, he began to work as a worker in building in the city. The more he worked, the more he learned and gained experience. He had experineced almost every task related to building issues before he graduated from the university. Since then, he has educated many other workers, and now, he has 20 other professionals working by his side. So long as he spent his time working on different majors, he could not have become a professional engineer.

In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned rationalizations into account, I think being a professional in one specific major is better than having a shallow knowledge of diverse things. To recapitulate my opinions, experts not only are exposed to more job offers with high salaries but also can teach others to be their assistants which lead to more demand of their expertise among employers.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an individual' or simply 'individuals'?
Suggestion: an individual; individuals
...l majors is substantially important for an individuals future success in both academic and wor...
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Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cular subject will cause more job offers in future, mainly because challenging jo...
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Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...lar subject will cause more job offers in future, mainly because challenging jobs requir...
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Line 5, column 127, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...can teach their experience to others as the know every details of a job and can prepare ...
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Line 5, column 589, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... he has educated many other workers, and now, he has 20 other professionals worki...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, then, thus, well, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2693.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28039215686 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12025356574 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564705882353 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 851.4 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4044817376 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.576923077 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6153846154 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0768870609911 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0185311794688 0.076458572812 24% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420187735476 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0558764087495 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369125930988 0.0645574589148 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 154.0 86.8835125448 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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