TPO-32 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answe

There has been much discussion around the topic of weather young people are able to influence on the important decisions in their country or not. Speaking personally, I suppose that young people can influence on society as effectively as adults do. I will reinforce my opinion by providing several examples.

In the first place, nowadays young people are presented in the government. In other words, they are also responsible for making important decision that influence on future of everyone. I assert that if someone has fresh ideas and understands how he or she can change the problematic situation then it is possible to do. For example my friend while he was studing in economical university was extremely disappointed by university’s educational system. Hovewer, he always was trying to talk about this problem with the university government by giving some suggestion how it could be changed. Suddenly, the government heard him and by analyzing his suggestions applied some improvement to the university educational system. Therefore, there are no doubts that everyone can bring changes because it is up to a person and person’s desires to bring this changes.

Secondly, there are enermous quantity of various forums which are specially directed to the students’ collaboration and debating about different society issues. More to say, It is not just a brief discussion among the students, It an important event where students share their opinion with the politicians or businessmen concerning hot topics and hot problems. I had an opportunity to be on one of such forums, and I gather to say that students ideas and opinions are percieved seriously by politicians and, more importantly, they tend to change their political program by taking in account student’s suggestions.

Finally, new changes and developments weren’t possible without young minds. An obvious example of that was a young group which absolutely change the indoor atmosphere in one pharmaceutical company. They apply a lot of interesting atributes of communication by using fresh ideas. In the light of above, I suppose that this changes would be a example for other companies.

To wrap up, I want to emphesize that age isn’t the reason why a person’s opinion shouldn’t be taken in account if it worth it.

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Average: 8.3 (4 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 469, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
...'s educational system. Hovewer, he always was trying to talk about this problem with ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 346, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e, I suppose that this changes would be a example for other companies. To wrap...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, i suppose, no doubt, in other words, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1964.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33695652174 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17612713125 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567934782609 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4243709944 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.111111111 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.05555555556 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124195390154 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425168753728 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471208423185 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0710205904272 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555408078574 0.0645574589148 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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