TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U

There is no doubt that technology has played a prominent role in every societies. No one can deny the advantages of technology. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this issues can technology make it easier for training of children. Some people may hold this viewpoint that technology especially cell phone, kind of games and so on are completely useless and harmful for bodies. So, it cause so many problems for children's education. Whereas, some others my take an opposite viewpoint and believe that children need to interact with this gadgets because of many options and make it easier for them to study better. From my own perspective the second belief is true .In what follows, will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
One of the reasons coming to mind at first is that device such as cell phone, iPad, lap top and so on have many useful options. Nowadays, nearly most of juvenile and adolescent tend to play and use of this device because of help to improve their education. As a clarification, most of young people go to school and communicate with each other in the class and out of the class by using gadgets. Take my experience as an example, in my English class most of children used cell phone to promote their listening skills or they have used to search more information and knowledge in the internet. So, each gadgets has useful for young in order to improve their knowledge and education.
Another point which deserves some words here is that young use gadget to change their moods. In such a situation, children spend most of day at schools and they need to refresh their body. In fact after school, they become exhausted and bore because of challenging many complicate problems such as mathematics, physics questions and so on. Hence, many of teenagers use cell phone and smart phone in order to watch a movies or play games or contact with each other as recovery their brain. Therefore, smart phone or other device not only can help to better training and understanding but also, are more fun for young.
In contrast of the aforementioned reasons, by allocating more time in using cell phone and other gadgets cause some problem such as obesity, blood presser or diabetes. As a matter of fact, some children addicted to smart phone's game, so, they allocate most of his/her time to has fun time or something else rather than having physical activities or training other courses such as painting. Therefore, in the future, they encounter some issues such as obesity after that they have harsh condition to study and better training.
To make a long story short, from all the above mentioned points and reasons, one we can safely draw a conclusion if one weight merits and demerits of the above statements we can realize that cell phone and other gadgets have many advantages and options which student can use to change the level of education and change their mood.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'causes'?
Suggestion: causes
... useless and harmful for bodies. So, it cause so many problems for childrens educatio...
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Line 2, column 554, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...eve that children need to interact with this gadgets because of many options and mak...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
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Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
...ence as an example, in my English class most of children used cell phone to promote their listen...
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Line 4, column 414, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a movie' or simply 'movies'?
Suggestion: a movie; movies
...phone and smart phone in order to watch a movies or play games or contact with each othe...
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Line 5, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
...g but also, are more fun for young. In contrast of the aforementioned reasons, by alloc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, regarding, second, so, therefore, whereas, in contrast, in fact, kind of, no doubt, such as, as a matter of fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2415.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83967935872 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54618189389 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478957915832 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 760.5 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4338434415 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7619047619 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95238095238 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14127418109 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473046959381 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0334463343011 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.086886565539 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275742198422 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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