Tpo 35- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better to finish a project completely and then begin another project than to work on two or more projects at the same time
there is no shortage of debate that well-known persons and athletes earn their loyalty as a result of care and attention that has paid for their fans. The controversial question which arises here is whether this people deserve to have a privacy life. As far as I am concerned, celebrities need more time to allocate it for themselves without struggling with journalists and marginal news. I feel this way for two main reasons which will be explored in the following paragraphs.
First of all, one should take into account the fact that popular persons after working hard on a specific areas need to relax and far away from any news. Maybe they have a tendency to going out with their friends or eating dinner in a resturant. If we interrupt when they are chatting it can be such a disgusting time for them. my friend experience is a compelling answer. when he was in high school he started to became an actor. after a while he became reputate person, but when he wants to spend his time with friends, he always had trubble; because he had many fans who were willing take a photo with him. in hence, he always engaged with his fans and couldn't use his time efficiently.
Another remarkable reason to illuminate why I strongly believe celebrities deserve to have privacy is sometimes they need to boost their skills. For example, they want to work out or play tennis. as a result, they need a time to amend their skill for their personal and professional pursuit. when people start to intrude, it is difficult for them to focus on that activity. Thus, the idea popped into their head to cease this activity because they think it doesn't have enough yield. For instance, when my friend went to the club to play tennis, all the people looked at him and sometime onset to took a photo with him when he was engaged with his play. Had he played with privacy and without attention of others, he would have had an enjoyable time there.
In conclusion, some famous ceremonies and athletes need to have a time dedicate it for themselves. it means that they deserve to have a privacy because sometimes they want to relax alone or with their friend and because they need some time to improve their skills for their personal life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, look, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63291139241 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43528776578 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518987341772 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5262266526 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0742094906823 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0261777621016 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0210302473352 0.0737576698707 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0512915795723 0.150856017488 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00873234285273 0.0645574589148 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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