TPO 36- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universit

Education has significant role in all over the country. Some people believe it is necessory for a government cost on the education for young children instead of spend money on universities and some disagree. In my opinion, education for young individuals in more important, because they are educational foundasion in a country and spend money for them means investment for the future indeed. There are two reasons why I feel this way, which I will explore in the following essay.

Firt of all, young childern are educational foundasion in a country. If educational base of a child be strong in near future he or she definietly will be successful. Take my self az an example, when I was a elementry student, we had a lot of educational facilities such as equiped lablatory educated and knowledgeable teachers that taught us deeply and detailed that most of the student in our class accepted in high rank universities. That impossible If we had not a efficient teachers they took time on us and indeed cause a society better developed. Furthermore, If children learn problem in childhood never forget and that last in their memory longly.

Secondly, spend money for young children can be effective investment in the future. Economic and social problem depend on individuals and If a people learn problem in young age they have less crusial problem in the future. For instance, in most of the japan schools, children get familiar with pratctival and experimental problems in addition to theory one, that cause they get ready for jobs in adulthood age. And it is not time-consuming for government that after graduated from university they do not have any concern about vacant position in community for a career. Tehy not only are educated students but also have a stable career in the future and that help both individuals and society.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that spend money for young individual is preferable than spend on universities because of they are educational foendation and investment in the future for a successful country.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03823529412 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93207267526 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538235294118 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 551.7 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.752640663 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.2 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.13333333333 5.45110844103 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322766163937 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113618772939 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111499815984 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231896166741 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114681781317 0.0645574589148 178% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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