TPO 36 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People hold different attitudes towards how the government spends money on education. While some argues that more emphasis should be put on education of very young children ranging from five to ten years old, I give my vote to the opinion that students at the universities are the better target. There are two reasons supporting my view which will be explored in the below essay.
On the one hand, kindergarten and primary educations require moderate facilities like simple text books and basic experimental equipment. On the other hand, tertiary peers are in need of a huge number of elaborate facilities such as powerful computer systems, quality laboratories to facilitate the study. As the result, universities education requires states to dig deep into their pockets to guarantee the outcome of students and quality of researches. For example, Vietnamese government has spent billions of dollars every year on supporting engineering universities and colleges on carrying out researches and buying advance equipment otherwise students cannot keep pace with the development of modern technology. In contrast, Vietnamese primary education only requires moderate budget to maintain their facilities.
Secondly, university students form the main workforce of a nation. The very young pupils, in contrast, do not directly and immediately contribute to the prosperity and stability of a nation. As the result, more attention should be paid to train the former, helping them gain sufficient understanding and knowledge of engineering, technology, finance in order that graduate students are able to produce national products effectively and efficiently. Current statistics in my country has shown that people ranging from eighteen to twenty three years olds account for thirty five percent of national workforce. However, their background is not good enough to incorporate into to labor market. Thus, it is required to invest extensively into their education in order to maximize their potentials.
In conclusion, those abovementioned reasons put weight to my view that it is crucial for governments to prioritize financial support to higher education so that the long-term development of nations can be secured.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 530, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: twenty-three
...wn that people ranging from eighteen to twenty three years olds account for thirty five perc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1882.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58456973294 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0169856124 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611275964392 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0267325881 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.466666667 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4666666667 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195315735659 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0550569256032 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056702839103 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115860012096 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492815486324 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 58.1214874552 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 10.9000537634 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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