TPO 39
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
It is a highly debated issue whether it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure and successful future in the past, which can be approached in different angles due to its complexity. Deeply deliberating over this issue, although some may agree with it, it is my firm belief that it was easier today. The following discussions reveal my stand and reasoning.
First of all, modern society has a fuller law system than before, which includes a security protocol for companies to follow. If a job is not secure, the government can require employers to pay heavy fines, even sending them to the jail. By this comprehensive system, one can easily identify which job is not dangerous, further leading to a secure future. Moreover, the safety of jobs not only benefits from the law system, but also takes advantage from the convenient communications given by the internet. For instance, an accident that took away dozens of lives happened at a car factory in Taiwan ten years ago. The news revealed that the machines there are old and did not follow the protocol of checking them yearly, which is the reason this accident happened. This news spread quickly between people, soon the government noticed and started to inspect all factories, even passing new laws of more rigorous regulations and penalties. Since then, by watching the news, it is easy for people to know whether a company follows the security rules or not. The law system together with the news system makes finding a safe job much easier.
Besides, the internet also presents knowledge of a job more comprehensively than before, knowing a job before applying makes one easier to identify which career may lead to a wealthy and successful future. My own experience is a compelling example of this. I am a college graduate of mathematics. By surfing the internet, it is not hard for me to identify jobs in my profession that I liked. After putting my target on some specific jobs, it is also convenient to identify famous people and working environments in that industry. Which job gives more salary; which job has less work time; what I might learn in that job, questions once difficult for a freshman to identify become much easier to understand due to the internet. Thanks to the information online, I picked a perfect job for me, worked happily till now and has gained sufficient money to buy a house at a young age.
To sum up, with the reasons mentioned above, I deeply believe that it is easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, then, for instance, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2136.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77852348993 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6514248436 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539149888143 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0390205978 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.8 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.35 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303985125556 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0861019867618 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101058634945 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237883783672 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106007031853 0.0645574589148 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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