TPO 39
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is critical for us what kinds of jobs can build a solid basis of our lives. I admit that there are a lot of opinions about this; however, finding job or career that will lead to a successful future is now more difficult than before, in my opinion. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, there are a lot of jobs that used to be recognized as a successful career but now are at the danger of disappearing. There is no denying that the speed of the change of the world is becoming faster and faster due to the technologies such as artificial intelligence, robotics, IoT. As a result, many old jobs are disappearing, and sometimes these jobs contain those that were used to be regarded as a successful jobs or careers. For example, one of my friends, Joe, is a lawyer. He was very intelligent, and when he became a lawyer, many people around us thought that he would earn a lot of money through his life. However, due to the advent of the AI, the demand of lawyer is decreasing. He does not loose his jobs, but he is not able to earn a lot of money to the extent that we expected.
Next, the variety of jobs are increasing nowadays. Some jobs are disappearing as I mentioned earlier. On the other hand, many new jobs are created, and the number of kinds of jobs is increasing. The story of my friend, Joe, is a compelling example of this. When joe was a freshman at university, he struggled with getting better grades at university, he thought that he would not be successful in his career. One day he started activity as a Youtuber. He liked music and he often uploaded the video that explain the history of music. Many of us did not expect that his video will not be popular, however, his videos really caught on among young people. Finally, he quit the university and he can earn enough money by the activity of Youtuber.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that it became harder to distinguish what career will secure our successful future. This is because there are a lot of jobs that were once regarded as a successful career but now are disappearing, and the variety of the jobs is increasing these days.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 427, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'job'?
Suggestion: job
...ere used to be regarded as a successful jobs or careers. For example, one of my frie...
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Line 3, column 716, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...nd of lawyer is decreasing. He does not loose his jobs, but he is not able to earn a ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, really, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1772.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44110275689 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63226151788 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466165413534 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.112643227 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.380952381 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153622233679 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047420862209 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476686494835 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109861828285 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265298737701 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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