TPO 46
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The opinions of celebrities sometimes affect our way of thinking. I admit that there are many opinions about the influence of celebrities; however, I think that these opinions have more impact on young people than they do on older people. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, young people have more opportunities to get in touch with the opinions of celebrities through the internet. There is no denying that many young people use social media such as Facebook, Twitter, and Instagram to get information from celebrities. This information sometimes has a large impact on their daily lives. For example, some famous actors said that the comic called "Demon Slayer" was exciting several months ago. A lot of young noticed that opinion, and many of them started to read the Demon Slayer. Young people around us now always share their impressions through social media. On the other hand, older people around me do not know why Demon Slayer is so popular among young people because they are not familiar with social media.
Next, older people do not tend to change their opinions compared to younger people. People build their values or way of thinking through their lives. Older people already have gotten touch many viewpoints. As a result, it is hard to change their points of view. On the other hand, young people can change their way of thinking more flexible. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a freshman at university, I participated in a seminar with my friends about building a startup company by a famous entrepreneur. The speaker said that building a startup company is not risk these days. After the seminar, I decided to create a startup with my friends. However, my parents opposed this idea, and they recommended me to work at a big company. Even after I introduced what I heard in the seminar, they did not change their opinion.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that the opinions of celebrities have more impact on younger people than they do on older people. This is because young people have more chances to get information about celebrities through the internet, and it is hard for older people to change their way of thinking.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1868.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89005235602 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61107512918 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460732984293 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5304337477 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2173913043 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6086956522 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86956521739 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27376243391 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862816511315 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795064997104 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201088695904 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462249763323 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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