TPO 49 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no denying that making friends with other people is essential for social life. Some people prefer to maintain deep relationships with a small number of people; others like to expand their connections. I grant that there are many opinions about this topic; however, I disagree with the idea that deepening friendships with a small number of people in the long term is more important for happiness. I feel this way mainly two reasons for this that I will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, the ability to make new connections easily helps us expand our point of view. Our values and ways of thinking are affected by the people around us. If we socialize with people whose cultural values or backgrounds are different from us, we can learn new ways of thinking and break stereotypes. The skill of making friends with other people provides us a lot of opportunities for that. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a high school student, I made a trip to India with my friends. I was so surprised at seeing people in India eating their meal with their hands. I wanted to know the reasons; I was so shy that they cannot ask them why they did so. However, one of my friends, Ken, asked them a question with no hesitation. The local people kindly told us the history and the cultural value of India, and we could expand our perspectives. Through this experience, I learned the importance of the skill of socializing.
Second, making wide connections lets us cope with the difficulties in daily life easily. We cannot live without others' help. Therefore, it is imperative for us to make large connections when we have to tackle some problems. For example, when I was a freshman at university, I was required to do an assignment of programming in computer science class. I did not have an opportunity of programming at that time, and the assignment was so complicated that none of my friends could solve it. However, I, fortunately, got to know a student who was good at computer programming in extracurricular activities, which I participated in for the sake of expanding my connections. He told me the basics of programming. Consequently, I could finish the assignments.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that expanding connections easily is more important than maintaining friendships within a particular community. This is because the ability to make connections helps us to expand our viewpoints and to solve problems that we face in our daily lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...fer to maintain deep relationships with a small number of people; others like to expand their con...
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Line 1, column 332, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...he idea that deepening friendships with a small number of people in the long term is more importa...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...I will explain in the following essay. To begin with, the ability to make new c...
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Line 3, column 142, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...es and ways of thinking are affected by the people around us. If we socialize with people whose cult...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, second, so, therefore, for example, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85046728972 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95942367499 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507009345794 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.1773269395 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.04 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.12 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271993761793 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735340775698 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750287594168 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176120009841 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.093590673204 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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