TPO 45
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents have a large impact on the decisions of young people. I admit that there are many opinions about how big the influence of parents has on the decisions of young people; however, young people today are better able to choose their lives without depending on their parents. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, young people today can get more information about careers through the internet. There is no denying that many young people today use social media to get information. Young people can easily socialize with people who have different careers from theirs. As a result, young people can get vivid information about specific careers their parents have not been familiar with. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a freshman at university, I happened to know a famous entrepreneur through the internet. I contacted him, and he told me that making a startup company is not a risk. I could learn how to build a start-up from him. Consequently, I decided to build a start-up company even though my parents were unfamiliar with building a company.
Second, young people, today can get specific education easily than before without depending on their parents. These days costs of learning are decreasing because there are many online courses such as programming and English conversation. Even if parents cannot afford the high tuition fees of university, young people today can learn needed skills in their careers. For example, one of my friends, Ken, was interested in computer science, but his parents could not pay the university's tuition fee. He had no choice but to give up entering the university, but he could find an inexpensive online course about programming. He could learn programming skills through the online course, and consequently, he could be an engineer for a famous IT company. He can now earn a lot of money with his skills.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that young people today can decide their own lives without being too dependent on their parents. This is because young people today can get more information through the internet about careers that their parents are not familiar with. It became easier for young people to get specific skills needed for their careers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'cost'.
Suggestion: cost
... depending on their parents. These days costs of learning are decreasing because ther...
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Line 5, column 637, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to program', 'to programme'.
Suggestion: to program; to programme
...ourse about programming. He could learn programming skills through the online course, and c...
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Line 5, column 741, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
...he could be an engineer for a famous IT company. He can now earn a lot of money with hi...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 750, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...be an engineer for a famous IT company. He can now earn a lot of money with his sk...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, second, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1912.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99216710183 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61768066109 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480417754569 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1653942388 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9090909091 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4090909091 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383942841647 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119436288872 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106440842204 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277417089789 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100029758898 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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