TPO 39, Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nobody can overlook the fact that in this sophisticated and progressive world, where we live, careers play a considerable role in everyone life. Some people hold the opinion that finding a job with anticipated bright future was easier in the past than today, however, others stand at the other side of this continuum and believe that nowadays it has become more convenient. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with the first group and my reasons to substantiate this point of view are elaborated hereupon
To begin with, society complexity was lower in the past at a high degree, hence it was more likely to predict what would be the future of a career. In other words, the inflation fluctuation was not as severe as today, and the technology advancement was not as fast as these days. As a result, it was less probable that one career becomes completely omitted from the community. For example, all of my ancestors were tailors, and they continue this job for several generations without any threat. However, if they lived in these days conditions, they would face plenty of barriers because of the industrialization and their weakness to compete with high-tech cloth production. Consequently, selecting a job with an apparent future was more doable in the past.
Furthermore, people`s definition of success was very different from now and they would become satisfied easily by the revenues of their job. In other words, their expectations from life were not as high as nowadays. I mean, maybe the quality of their lives was not very persuading but because of the uniformity of society and the lack of high difference between people economic conditions, it was not significantly noticeable. For instance, one of my friends` progenitors were farmers and their descendants inherited that career generation after generation. It is utterly apparent to everybody that this job has not a huge amount of profits. However, they were satisfied and continued for several years. As a result, job satisfaction is very dependent on people expectations.
In a nutshell, according to aforementioned reasons, choosing a job that leads to a bright future was more convenient in the past because not only was the complexity of society lower than now but also the people expectations from life were lower.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 235, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
... also the people expectations from life were lower.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, so, as to, for example, for instance, i mean, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1055408971 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99977141217 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519788918206 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.727260874 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.9375 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6875 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 5.45110844103 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172127385735 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577484707735 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0467034710203 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110506338567 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321372302273 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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