TPO 39 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are various approaches to a successful future. Traditionally, people viewed certain types of jobs as a highway to success. However, the types of jobs and the definition of success have gradually changed today due to the rapid development in every aspect. I personally agree that it was easier to identify a successful career in the past than it is at present with the following reasons and examples.
To begin with, as we can observe, many new types of jobs have popped up today in response to the changing world. careers, such as software engineering and data scientist, were what people could not imagine before but become popular in the recent years. With high profession and widespread impact to our society, these jobs are thus regarded as successful careers that attract more and more people devoted into these fields. some outstanding stories of these new careers are also the compelling examples to demonstrate what people consider an excellent career has changed. For instance, if we take a look into the top 500 billionaires of the world, most of them are the owners of tech giants instead of doctors or lawyers, which used to be considered as dream careers. To put it into a simple way, the ideal jobs today should not be limited to certain catalogues anymore.
Moreover, some careers people were eager to pursue for have been fallen behind the times and disappear. For instance, bank teller was one of the most competitive jobs in the past. Only people with professional ability and well-educated background had the opportunities to step into this field. however, the innovation of technology changes the appearance of the financial industry. Auto machines with low costs and high efficiency have replaced human resource in these positions. Consequently, bank tellers inevitably encountered the faith of elimination.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that today it is hardly to identify a secure and successful career as easily as before. this is because the rapidly changing world brings more new types of jobs that were beyond human's imagination before, and because the technology has made a silent revolution in the labor market and redefine a successful career in the past.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, look, moreover, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14404432133 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79979631968 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565096952909 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.255925197 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.166666667 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0555555556 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225689183508 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724397248764 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731053006471 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151844340008 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0894199510492 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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