TPO 40 -1
The main topic of both the passage and lecture is the possibility of humans living on other planets, especially Venus. The reading passage proposes three difficulties for habitation in Venus, which are the high pressure, water supply problem, and power issues. However, the lecturer seems to cast doubts on the elucidations explained by the author. Believing that with establishing a station in the outer atmosphere of the Venus, people can become resident there. He finds the reading proofs unconvincing and disproves each reason mentioned in the text, specifically.
To begin with, the first reason described in the article is regarding the fact that pressure on the Venus surface is 90 times greater than the Earth surface. Due to high pressure, any spacecraft or other thing that will land on the surface of Venus will crash immediately. Conversely, the professor finds this statement debatable and refutes it. He asserts that by establishing a station in 40 kilometers of the Venus atmosphere, in which air pressure is roughly equal to Earth's surface pressure and has no peril, living is possible in Venus.
Secondly, it is proposed in the reading passage that there is not any water reservoir on Venus. Also, the atmosphere of Venus contains hardly any oxygen or water vapor. Because of that, the permanent station idea is impractical. The lecturer rebuts this point, and He claims that although Venus's atmosphere is deficient in water or oxygen, they are many other chemical components. Also, He asserts that it is possible to produce water by the mentioned components. Consequently, it is not necessary to import the water.
Finally, whereas the author states that light is very low on the Venus surface and there are some problems to generate the electricity for powering the machines, the professor disproves this idea by explaining that electricity can be provided by establishing the station in the atmosphere and using both of the reflected lights by clouds and direct sunlight.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n in Venus, which are the high pressure, water supply problem, and power issues. ...
^^
Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'hardly' is usually put before the verb 'contains'.
Suggestion: hardly contains
...on Venus. Also, the atmosphere of Venus contains hardly any oxygen or water vapor. Because of t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, finally, first, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, whereas, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1826625387 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80917744559 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510835913313 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.2652395983 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.625 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1875 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5625 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0187979825035 0.236089414692 8% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00520779456012 0.076458572812 7% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0201697016018 0.0737576698707 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0110238346331 0.150856017488 7% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190938416787 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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