Whether offering money to children for each high score that they gain is beneficial for them or not. This is one of the questions having always been a source of contention. From my vantage point, parents should give money to children for each high grade they receive. In what follows, I will explain the most outstanding reasons for my viewpoint.
First, I am of the opinion that offering money to children who get a high score is beneficial for them on the grounds that offering money to them can motivate them to have a better performance in school. In fact, studying and taking exams have been seen a boring and stressful activity by most of the students, and they need something to push them forward in their studies. I believe that giving money to students who do well at school is a good motivation for them. My personal experience is a good example for this. Back in high school, I always had trouble studying the different syllabuses. Indeed, I wanted to become a musician, and I had been thinking that the material that teacher teaches is not related to my future career. In order to motivate me, my parents started to give me money for each good score that I got. So, I started to study more and get better scores. It not only motivated me to study more, but also provided me with a hoard of money with which I could get a music instrument.
Second, I believe that parents should offer money to the youngsters who perform well at school on account of the fact that it provides an opportunity for them to appreciate the value of money. Since getting a high grade need a lot of efforts, pupils who get money for their good scores can understand that making money needs hard work. These students, also, can realize that they should not waste their money by buying unnecessary things that they do not need. In this way, the students who try hard at school can accumulate money, and this money can help them in the future. In today's world, most of careers and education sources need enormous financial sources. So, the money that student receive from their parents for getting high scores at school can help them in upcoming days.
What has been argued here is that it is beneficial for students to get money from their parent when they get a high grade. This because in this way, students who do well at school not only can be motivated but also learn to appreciate the value of money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...udying and taking exams have been seen a boring and stressful activity by most of...
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the careers') or simply say ''most careers''.
Suggestion: most of the careers; most careers
...lp them in the future. In todays world, most of careers and education sources need enormous fin...
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Suggestion:
...learn to appreciate the value of money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, well, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5625 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36075591918 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4375 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2948880695 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8571428571 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.2380952381 5.45110844103 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324736789239 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116169031334 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685105194197 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23769323467 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00724431716918 0.0645574589148 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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