Psychologists believe that the purpose of studying plays a pivotal role in students' learning process. Although rewarding students can motivate students to study better at school, the effectiveness of rewarding students to stimulate them to study has been a matter of controversy for a long period.
One of the advantages of rewarding students for their high grades in school is that as children do not recognize any benefit for their studying at the first years of their life and think of studying as a useless work, they can be stimulated to study well by offering financial rewards such as money or toys. Therefore, a group of psychologists suggests that parent offer money to their children as a means for them to study better. Also the results of a survey conducted on children between the age of 7 to 10 support this idea. This study indicates that students who are offered money get better results in their school exams.
On the other hand, one of the disadvantages of the abovementioned idea is that the students try hard to get high grades only if their parents promise them money. Indeed, if parents cannot afford to give their children money, they lose their motivation and as a result, do not do their best to get high grades. Not only do the students become lazier, but they also get low grades which can adversely affect their future career. Since they cannot get high grades, they lose the chance to be accepted at well- known universities which also lowers their chance to get a high reputation job in the future.
In addition, as the students receive a special amount of money for each of their courses passed with a high degree, they tend to expect more things as they study at higher levels. In other words, considering the greedy nature of human beings, students increase their level of expectation since the received reward would not satisfy them anymore. For example, a university student, who was initially offered 10 dollars at his elementary school, may expect his family to buy him a relatively expensive car.
To put the issue into perspective, I Strongly assert that it is a bad idea to offer students money to motivate them getting high marks at schools since the disadvantages of this idea outweigh its mentioned advantage.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
...ays a pivotal role in students learning process. Although rewarding students can motiva...
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Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...en as a means for them to study better. Also the results of a survey conducted on ch...
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Line 5, column 602, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...et a high reputation job in the future. In addition, as the students receive a s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87305699482 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64054205571 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502590673575 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.3948620773 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.357142857 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5714285714 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21428571429 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310709804802 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12932768344 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693560537113 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180514253321 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0942808570977 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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