Education is an important part of life and from parents sight, it is one of the important steps of their children's growth. hence most of them have a specific attention on it. there are too many articles has been published about different educational methods. offer money as a reward to the children by their parents is one of these methods that I deeply agree with that as it has lots of advantageous which in the following I brought two of them.
First and foremost is motivation. parents by giving money to their children as they got a good mark in school they indirectly motivate them. children when giving the money, they realize that if they get a good mark again, they would have money again too. because they know that how valuable money is they work harder and try to study hard and understand better to get more money. for instance, when I was 8 years old, my mom gave money as a reward when I got a good mark at school. I loved to have money because by that money I wanted to buy anything that I wanted without caring about does it expensive or not. therefore this method motivated me to get a good mark for more money. and step by step I became a good student in my class and a rich daughter (what I taught ) in the home. strongly my experience shows that how money can motivate children.
The second which isn't less important than the first one is manipulation. I think that this way not only helps children to be a success in their school but also help them to learn how to manipulate their money. when they get money, they might spend all the money they got in one day, they maybe save them because they make a plan to buy an expensive toy which needs more money then they decide to do that.therefore they learn how to manage their money easily. this is lessons of life and I believe that near the education each child should learn that.if their parent wants their children to be a practical person for himself and society. for example, at that time when my mom gave me money, another reason why I studied to get good mark was that I wanted to buy a bicycle an my parents told me that if iwan it I have to spend my own money, therefore, this idea was ignited that I have to study and get good mark to get money but it wasn't enough I have to save them to reach to the bicycle price, as it was hard for me but I did it. and now I'm really precise on my account and I can manage them expertly.
In generally, offer money by parents would be a good method for children to improve them in their academic majors and even in their life.children in school-age are smart and by a little motivation can show their talent and establish it easily.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, really, second, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 89.0 43.0788530466 207% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2125.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36344969199 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36204437139 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449691991786 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.8884365291 48.9658058833 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6470588235 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 35.0 5.5376344086 632% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325908685899 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112011537184 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833929716435 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213260521759 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639689211199 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.6 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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