TPO 40- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents always try various methods to encourage their young children to get better results in their school life. In this regard, there is a question between parents that whether they determine this reward by giving money for high marks or find other means of the motivation? I definitely support the idea of giving money to young children for reasons stated as below.
To begin with, people in all ages need an impetus to force them do their tasks efficiently. In fact, they set their goals based on the rewards getting after passing each level successfully. Parents should do the same method by assigning some tasks to raise their kid's attention toward making better grades in their school life. Moreover, this reward of encouragement can make young people responsible in their life and prepare them better for future. That is to say, if they do not improve their performance in school, parents will not praise them, so they understand that by working hard, there is always a compensation for all the mistakes. The same scenario will happen in their working life if they fail to do their tasks well. Consequently, parents should set this method in their children's school life because this is not only raise their awareness to reach to the rewards and then improves their academic performance but also helps them be responsible in their normal life.
In addition, as universities allocate the scholarships for diligent students to encourage them for their performance, it motivates more and more students to achieve this reward. This would advance university overall performance because it creates a competing ambiance between students in the university to raise their grades. In the same regard, parents can apply this method for their young children to encourage them positively. However, this method has some drawbacks like making an extreme pressure for the children who get the low grades. Because on their point of view this method is a game and if they lose, they may feel depressed and disappointed. Thus, parents should control their children's reaction for bad grades and let them be motivated by giving some motivational words.
In sum, just as the argument I mentioned above, I strongly think that parents should praise their young children for their high marks because they can be motivated for better results and this can make them responsible in their future life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, well, in addition, in fact, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1993.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07124681934 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56377959922 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460559796438 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0557634565 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.235294118 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1176470588 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333636733719 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132657108245 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481020338276 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239483568468 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500491047037 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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