TPO20- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As people want to earn more money, they always try new and different ways to be successful. They tend to take risks to examine their new attitudes and there is no guarantee for success. However, there are some believe that it is better to rely on your experience and follow what you know well. Therefore, I strongly disagree with this statement that successful people take risks to obtain the success. To hold my opinion there are some reasons stated as below.
To begin with, if you go through your experience and follow the rules and regulations, which have been validated before, your performance would be more productive. Because as long as you do not have any information about the new ways you are taking a risk, trying new things is just like gambling and it would be a path to failure. In this regard, would not it be more logical to take risks on something you think is right? Take my father's experience as a businessman for instance, he is a kind of person who always sets his own rules based on evident and experience he has just heard or learnt. As a result, he has never taken a risk over an unstable situation, so he is still a wise and successful businessman.
In addition, examining new things as long as having potential risks is time-taking because you have to accumulate a huge amount of information relating the way you want to start. In some extreme cases, it may take years to obtain a little positive change to success. Thus, it is beneficial to rely on your own experience to achieve the success in less time.
Paradoxically, according to a saying tells that, “No pain, no gain”, it is impossible to enhance your knowledge or make a huge change in your life if only you take risks. Take some successful people for example, they were ordinary people but they were all risk takers making big inventions and opening new ways for people in their field of study. Because they have been willing to take on the risky challenge that other people would say, “Oh, I’m not sure I want to do that.” In fact, they have taken on a lot of risky roles. They were risky to some people but to them it was a great opportunity allowing them to learn new things and take on a bigger role and a bigger organization.
In conclusion, although there are a few renowned people who have taken new and challenging ways to gain the success in their life, I definitely think that most of the people should follow the way they know well because it is more efficient and the results would be satisfactory. Besides, this way they can save more time to reach to the desired goals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risks examining'.
Suggestion: risks examining
...ays to be successful. They tend to take risks to examine their new attitudes and there is no gua...
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Line 1, column 374, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risks obtaining'.
Suggestion: risks obtaining
...s statement that successful people take risks to obtain the success. To hold my opinion there a...
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Line 2, column 361, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...o failure. In this regard, would not it be more logical to take risks on something...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, you know, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2136.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58369098712 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58864111657 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472103004292 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6168824448 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.421052632 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5263157895 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21052631579 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314375163251 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100593990528 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589224605344 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182537446719 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674146950481 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.