TPO 40
Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Admiring children and encouraging them is an appropriate idea in any field of education. This will make sufficient impetus for being a successful person in all stages in their life. Although some people claim financial gifts is a good option and some others assert that giving prize for students' assignments is not advisable but I don not think so. In my view, giving logical gifts is well, However, money is not effective always. I feel this way for 3 reasons which I will explore them in following essay.
Firstly, training to teenagers who are in educating period is very sensitive. Some students have a special ability. As a result, they should be aware that only their trying is important and if they are not talented for having maximum grades in their courses, it will not reduce the value of their efforts. For example, when I was in high school, I did not have high marks but I could earn incredible results in sports. Had not my father support me that time, I could not have been an international soccer man.
In addition, giving award for each grade will reduce the value and efficiency of action. Consider, a child who earn a prize for each score gets used to it and if one time his parents can not prepare a gift, he or she will loose his or her prompt. Not only it is possible that the student does not try any more but also it may be more awe full and break the trust to his or her parents!
Last but not least, money is not always appropriate choice for encouraging the younger because often they have not enough financial knowledge for spending money. I will exemplify my point with a true story about something which happened to me. When I was a elementary school student I wasted considerable amount of my money for buying speck value things such as decal, chips, etc. Being careful parents, they would provide me useful and healthy things.
Overall, what drives some fathers and mothers not devote money for giving superior intend to their children's prosperous experiences may fall in to 3 main categories including pondering to their certain talents, maintaining the impressive effect of gifts and attention to maturity of them for getting wisdom and reasonable decisions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 424, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...s well, However, money is not effective always. I feel this way for 3 reasons which I ...
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Line 5, column 223, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
... can not prepare a gift, he or she will loose his or her prompt. Not only it is possi...
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Line 7, column 256, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ething which happened to me. When I was a elementary school student I wasted cons...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, well, for example, i feel, in addition, such as, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74739583333 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52413346096 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578125 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.9135570163 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.235294118 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5882352941 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253158244481 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699343802858 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04579882784 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13070222591 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158018982942 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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