TPO-41: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern days of evolving technologies and overwhelming information, education, especially the lower levels of education thought in schools, has lost its true value and position in the society. An evidence for that, as some imply, is the lack of appreciation and social class that the teachers are faced with today. Although some people disagree with this assumption, I also think teachers have lost much of their respect and social status in today’s societies in comparison with the past. Some of the reasons corroborating this point are elaborated as follows.
With the growing amount of information and the easy access to the data one seeks for through the internet, some might even question the necessity of school and education. In the past, knowledge was restricted to a small portion of the society, the elite. Therefore, it was thought of as a valuable position, and teachers were viewed as the means to this cherished jewel. Many children had grown up reading about stories of poor children who dreamed of going to school, stirring up their own desire for knowledge. Or stories of influential teachers who had turned a poor country girl to a great writer, thus underscoring the teachers’ role in their minds. But with the spread of knowledge through all parts of the society and the universal access to the internet, knowledge is no longer a sought-after desire, but merely just a couple of clicks away. This, in turn, has led the dropped respect children once had for their teachers, since they are no longer the only means to their desires.
Another factor resulting to this decreased sense of appreciation in teachers might be the low salaries they are faced with each in return for their critical role in the society. The role of a teacher in a society is one of considerable importance, as they are the ones shaping and training the future leader, artists, doctors, engineers and businessmen of the world. When teachers feel that they are being underpaid for the hours of hard, vital work they are doing, they might show this sense of dissatisfaction in the classroom, thus lower the performance of the children. If their salaries were more in accord with they’re vital role in the society, they would also feel more appreciated and motivated to teach with all they’re vigor. This motivation will be evident by the children, leading to higher sense of respect and gratitude for their hard working teacher.
In general, I believe the role of our teachers has been undermined due to the rise in technologies and accessible information. If we do not come up with novel ways to improve a teacher’s status in the society, we might face severe consequences in the future, as teachers are shaping our next generation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
... societies in comparison with the past. Some of the reasons corroborating this point are el...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, thus, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2299.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98698481562 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84432488103 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507592190889 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.1282760179 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.722222222 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6111111111 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55555555556 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182718886906 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603393512086 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440534158389 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112617123493 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380901564043 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.