TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Nowadays, most of the parents are occupied and since they do not have enough time for spending with their children during the day. I think, if parents want to choose between either playing with children or doing things related to schoolwork, the former option is more important. Since the children should enjoy when they are with parents and children learn plenty stuff by playing. In addition, children will be healthier by playing game or sports.

First of all, children need to enjoy from their lives. They want to spend time with their children to become happy. Although, some children need assistance for doing their hare assignments, they can ask their teachers, tutors or friends for aids rather their parents. Since, some parents have no knowledge to help children for solving their assignments. In better words, good parents should be a good friend for children not a good teacher. Therefore, children need to enjoy their lives not just pass the school with high grades.

Second, children would learn many things via playing games or doing sports with their parents. A kid should learn some important thing about responsibility, team working, making decision, solving problems and etc. There are countless games and sports that teach these straits to children. Parents can foster their children talents and abilities by playing. For example, when parents play with their children soccer in the yard, they can teach to their children a successful person should be able to cooperate with other people. Hence, children should learn plenty things for living and they do not just concentrate on their school works.

Third, health is the most important endowment. Everybody should attach much importance to her health. Parents should play game and do sports with their children, since they would help their children to be healthy. Health can be categorized to two parts, mental and physical heath. In my opinion, playing will improve both of them. Children will be stronger, when they play game and do sports. For example, when they play soccer, their muscles will be more stronger and their strength will be improved. Moreover, playing with parents, promote the children and parents relation and they will have a better bond. As a result, playing game and doing sport have a more crucial role that doing school works.

All in all, parents should care more to playing game and doing sports rather doing children’s school works.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...king, making decision, solving problems and etc. There are countless games and sports th...
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Line 7, column 452, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: stronger
...they play soccer, their muscles will be more stronger and their strength will be improved. Mo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 114, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...her doing children's school works.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, third, for example, i think, in addition, as a result, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14035087719 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35048171482 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448621553885 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.5685440137 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.8846153846 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3461538462 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11538461538 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286858960401 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105818635615 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712814037761 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199525431736 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041855989884 0.0645574589148 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.94 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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