In this progressive and sophisticated world where we live in, human beings have been looking for best ways to allocate their time to their children and vocations. Some people believe it is an appropriate idea that parents spend their spare time playing games or sports with their children. However, others have an opposite point of view and believe parents should devote their spare time to practicing children's schoolwork. In my vantage point, parents should use their time playing games or sports with children. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
First, it is significant to be mentioned that, playing with children, is of significant importance in upbringing children. Playing gives children a sense of creativity, which can be used in any field, even it can enhance students' knowledge. In this regard, parents should spend their time to have games with their children in order to have beneficial effect not only in children's creativity and ability, but also in their studies. Since playing can be educational, and teach a wide variety of novel notions. For instance, I spend two hours every day playing fun games such as word flash cards with my daughter. We have enjoyable time with each other, besides she learn how to create new words by changing flash cards in a creative manner, also this funny play improve her skill in making new words.
Another reason, which deserves some attention here is that, parents could help children to relieve their stress by playing fun games and sports. Students have demanding hours during their school day due to studying boring and stressful lessons. Thus, it would an appropriate chance for them to play with their parents and relieve their stress in order to concentrate better on their lessons and get ready for an active present in their class.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that, have fun games with children is more beneficial than use time doing things relating to schoolwork. Because playing can fortify children's capabilities and it is a good approach to relieving stress in order to perform better in study.
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Message: Consider replacing "in a creative manner" with adverb for "creative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...reate new words by changing flash cards in a creative manner, also this funny play improve her skill...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, thus, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03693181818 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54329599782 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534090909091 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2204439569 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.8125 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411083479078 0.236089414692 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143534694233 0.076458572812 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101793929702 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255385956047 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0925016470972 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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