There is no shortage of arguments about the most suitable ways to deal with our children perfectly. One of these issues is whether parents should spend spared times with their kids doing school's duties, or they should do fun stuff with them. In my opinion, playing with my children when I have a spare time would be better and I will explain my perspective on two main reasons.
First of all, parents would be create a strong relationship with their offspring if they could have fun with them. This way kids would have beautiful bonds with parents could last forever. Laughing and talking in favorite things would be more attractive to a child compared to boring school material. Furthermore, schools have already educated our childer so, our mission as parents to make them feel that they are the most beloved persons in the world and we enjoy spending every moment with them. For example, my kid told me he loves me because I share him his favorable games. I can change his mood for the better even though he is upset by playing together with puzzles and coloring books.
Secondly, spending times with our kids would be the most effective method to have a happy kid. Kids nowadays spend most of their day in schools. There is a lot of pressure on them to achieve academic success, and since they already could establish their homework under the guidance of their teacher. So, there is no need to increase that pressure by revising these tasks at homes. On contrary, I would prefer to release my kid's stress about the school, thus, I would encourage him to go out with me and spend exciting time in the park together. For instance, riding a bike and having a launch while sitting on the grass would be fabulous moments to enjoy with him, instead of pushing him to study with me further.
To sum up, I strongly believe having fun in our available time is a wise thing to do with our children rather than revising school subjects with them. Because that would build stronger bonds with our kids. In addition, that would help them to release their tension in order to be happy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 151, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...han revising school subjects with them. Because that would build stronger bonds with ou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62432432432 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28425710752 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532432432432 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7434384629 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0555555556 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5555555556 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61111111111 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234586348283 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803540770681 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674091194461 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171901371886 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483967752444 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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