TPO 44 Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Parents nowadays are so busy with their work that they sometimes forget to give attention and spend valuable time with their children. I firmly believe that whenever parents get time from their busy schedule, they must utilize that time with their children doing things together that are connected to schoolwork. I feel this way for certain reasons, which I will explore in the subsequent essay.
To begin with, when parents take interest in their children's schoolwork or help them in different subjects, kids feel motivation and encouragement. Not only this, it makes children think that if they go wrong somewhere, their parents are with them to aid them and that they are not alone. For example, last year, my little brother, Tim was not doing well in school. So, our mom decided to cut back to a part-time job and pay more attention to Tim's schoolwork. Whenever Tim comes back from school, after eating his lunch, mom and Tim would sit together and our mom helps him with his homework. As a result, Tim got better grades in school. Thus, he got our mom's attention and he knew mom would always be there for him no matter what.
Furthermore, when parents guide children in their schoolwork, it's more likely that children will achieve something great. In this case, not only children alone using his mind but parents are too. My personal example is a compelling one. I remember when I was in sixth standard, my dad helped me with my science project. Although it was a competition, my dad looked at me how busy I was collecting all the tools and painting the cardboard all night for almost a week. Consequently, my dad decided to jump right in and gave me ideas on how unique and appealing I could make this project different from others. Therefore, I was able to get a second position in my science project. If my dad had not given me ideas in doing school project, I would have not been able to get a second position in school.
To sum up, it is critical for parents to look after their kids. You never know what difficult tasks they are going through in schoolwork. And that is why parents should get some time to help them in schoolwork because this can motivate kids in thinking that there's someone who can catch them if they fall and also they might be able to achieve something great with the help of their parents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...this can motivate kids in thinking that theres someone who can catch them if they fall...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i feel, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1917.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61927710843 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43090614558 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518072289157 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6646630843 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2857142857 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7619047619 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.71428571429 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214437249037 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634776843733 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829652524072 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146466115556 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0996156682372 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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