tpo 44
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
In fact, having an effective relationship between parents and their children is essential in each ambitious family, what is really palled in our today rash days. Although some people claim that parents should attention more to kid's schoolwork during their limited times, but I do not think so. In my view, education should have been viewed from different perspectives. I feel this way for 3 main reasons which I will explore them in the following essay.
First of all, delegating some of our tasks is possible and usual today. For example, parents benefit from various facilities in daily life for providing more time for spending with their family. Consider how much money we spend for cleaning our house, preparing food, washing our dishes, etc. Since educating for children is essential, parents can take a tutor for better training their kids at home, too. through this strategy, they will be confidence that this important part of kid's life will be performed perfectly.
The second point is that expanding emotional relationship with children should be in high priority for mothers and fathers. However, they may think that having fun and playing games or sports may appear a kind of wasting time, but it is an emergency need for improving their interactions. For children no one can fill their parents situations, even if that person devotes much time for them. Spending time is a innate desire for growing mental and social abilities among younger people.
Last, Quality of relation is more important than quantity. There are many parents that only spend time with out any advantages for kids.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Through
...etter training their kids at home, too. through this strategy, they will be confidence ...
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Line 9, column 410, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...es much time for them. Spending time is a innate desire for growing mental and so...
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Line 13, column 104, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
...e are many parents that only spend time with out any advantages for kids.
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Line 13, column 138, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... time with out any advantages for kids.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, for example, i feel, in fact, kind of, first of all, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1354.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 265.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10943396226 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49811890782 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.656603773585 0.524837075471 125% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.2872176925 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2666666667 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53333333333 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197596181428 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0678442658205 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534797799034 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131985830142 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399478183927 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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