TPO 45 independent writing
The society is always comparing the difference on people's behaviors between the past and now. A controversy exists as whether young people are able to make decisions for themselves better than people in the past. As far as I concerned, I totally agree that today teenagers have more ability making decisions independently. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, parents today allow young people to make decision for themselves, that parents in the past didn't. Parents were playing a significant role for younger people in Chinese culture. Moreover, following our parents' suggestions was what we learnt from Confucianism. However, due to the globalization prevailing, Western concept on parenting, which is relatively open-minded, is gradually influencing Chinese people. Therefore, nowadays, parents tend to give children freedom on making decisions for themselves. My own experience as a kid demonstrates evidence of this. I was not a diligent students. I spent lots of my time on painting instead of studying. However, my mom choose to analyze the consequences of not studying and the benefits of painting to let me decide which I wanted to do more. Apparently, it is totally different from the way my grandma raise my mom.
Furthermore, young people today have a bunch of sources to help them make right decisions on their own unlike people in the past. Young people now are easily access to information when they are confused on difficult questions. That is to say, parents are not the only one to ask when young people are searching for answers. For example, Google search are fully open to everyone, our friends and teachers are easy to reach out on Facebook...etc. The more information young people have, the better ability of critical thinking they will have. That is to say, it will assist them to make decisions with multi-aspects. To take myself as an example, I was on a dilemma of which major to choose at the university. My parents are not familiar with what will be taught in the university. As a result, I searched for and contacted the students with majors that I was interested through Facebook, and their experience help me to make decisions of my own future.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that youngsters are better on making decisions than youngsters in the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 105, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...for themselves that parents in the past didnt Parents were playing a significant role...
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Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'student'?
Suggestion: student
...s evidence of this I was not a diligent students I spent lots of my time on painting ins...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...from the way my grandma raise my mom Furthermore young people today have a bunch of sour...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86005089059 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76914001226 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465648854962 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 393.0 20.1344086022 1952% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1910.0 100.406767564 1902% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 393.0 20.6045352989 1907% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 141.0 5.45110844103 2587% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00924330334053 0.236089414692 4% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00924330334053 0.076458572812 12% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00876188476068 0.150856017488 6% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0151760295756 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 198.0 11.7677419355 1683% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -327.42 58.1214874552 -563% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 156.6 10.1575268817 1542% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.39 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 26.42 8.01818996416 330% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 10.002688172 550% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 159.2 10.0537634409 1583% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 157.0 10.247311828 1532% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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